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Asher ran through the standard apology phrase rapidly, still catching his breath.

People who lived in Jonas’ community used a “standard apology” (3) to express their regret to others when they had done something wrong.

Jonas was alarmed by “an unidentified aircraft” (1) when it flew unexpectedly over the community.

Ch12

-         single sentence answers

-         models of “” quotation usage

 “flickering instant” (91)

On the way home from school, Jonas noticed that Fiona’s hair changed colour for one moment “flickering moment” (91) as they were saying goodbye.

-few words

-incorporated- quotation is added to my sentences

-grammatical

-relevant, on-topic

“fleeting indescribable change” (90)

On the way home from school, Jonas noticed that Fiona’s hair changed colour for one moment as they were saying goodbye.

As they were saying goodbye after school, Jonas noticed a “fleeting indescribable change” (90) in the colour of Fiona’s hair.  This suggests that Jonas’ power to “see beyond” (X) is getting stronger.

Jonas is a “special” boy. NO

Jonas is a special boy.

Jonas was “apprehensive” (4) about the upcoming Ceremony of Twelve.

USE YOUR BEST JUDGEMENT

Jonas is a nice boy.

“Jonas” “is” ”a” nice “boy”.

QUOTE PROOF

Jonas was “dismayed” (69) when he read the rules.  He had never considered that he might lie to others.

As they were saying goodbye after school, Jonas noticed an “indescribable change” (90) in the colour of Fiona’s hair.

As they were saying goodbye after school, Jonas noticed a “fleeting indescribable change” (90) in the colour of Fiona’s hair.

As they were saying goodbye after school, Jonas noticed a “fleeting … change” (90) in the colour of Fiona’s hair. 

… ellipsis- used to show some words have been eliminated

… in fiction- used to show hesitation

The little boy said, “ I want…a … an… ice cream.”

Jonas felt “anticipation, excitement, pride, and even the happy kinship with his friends.” (59)

Jonas felt “anticipation … [and] happy kinship.” (59)

[] square brackets- make small grammatical changes, stylistic changes

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Jonas no longer felt “happy kinship.” (59) with his school friends.

QUOTE 1-3 WORDS, KEEP IT SIMPLE FOR NOW, GET FANCY LATER

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EXAMPLE FROM NEWSPAPER

The judge said, “He is a very friendly man.”

The judge said, “[Harper] is a very friendly man.”

Jonas “hunched his shoulders” (58) because he was upset.

Jonas “hunched his shoulders… with shame” (58) because he wasn’t given an assignment.

Jonas felt “shame” (58) when the Chief Elder skipped him in the Ceremony of Twelve.