2. We found Judy who was
wandering in the bedroom and worrying
about her decision to buy the little house.- SOUNDS LIKE HASNT BOUGHT HOUSE YET
We found Judy wandering
in the bedroom, worrying about her decision
about having bought the little house.- SOUNDS LIKE BOUGHT HOUSE- NOT SURE IF
RIGHT CHOICE
We found Judy wandering
in the bedroom. She was worrying about her decision about having bought the
little house.
We found Judy. She was wandering in the bedroom and worrying about her decision to buy the
little house.
3. Everyone began to choose
a job.
Everyone chose a job and
began.
Everyone chose and began
a job.
4. Jim vacuumed the cobwebs
in every corner. Helen dismantled shelves
and threw the pieces on the growing garbage pile/ growing pile of garbage. I attacked the cupboards.
Jim vacuumed the cobwebs in every corner while Helen dismantled shelves
and threw the pieces on the growing garbage pile/ growing pile of garbage; meanwhile,
I attacked the cupboards.
5. The house was slowly
prepared for painting.
The house was prepared for painting slowly.
Slowly, the house was prepared for painting.- STYLE
We slowly prepared the house for painting.
WILLIAM STRONG- sentence variety. choice
DIFFERENT EMPHASIS- DIFFERENT INTENTIONS
6. The scaffolding was delivered
at noon, and the first can of paint was opened with ceremony.
7. One month and many
gallons of paint later, Judy’s home was ready for the next work crew, the
movers.
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