English 10 "" examples and example paragraph

“He claimed to know of the existence of a mysterious country called Sugarcandy Mountain.”

Moses the raven talked about “Sugarcandy Mountain” (10) which was like heaven for animals.

Moses the raven said that he knew about “a mysterious country called Sugarcandy Mountain.” (10)

Moses the raven said that he knew about “the existence of … Sugarcandy Mountain.” (10)

… ellipsis, must be grammatical

…… etc …… NOT ENGLISH

NOT GRAMMATICAL Moses the raven “claimed... Sugarcandy Mountain.” (10)

VERB TENSE PROBLEM Moses the raven talks to the animals about a kind of animal heaven.  He “claimed to know” (10) about a wonderful place that they will go when they die.

FIXED Moses the raven talked to the animals about a kind of animal heaven.  He “claimed to know” (10) about a wonderful place that they would go when they died.

FIXED Moses the raven talks to the animals about a kind of animal heaven.  He “claim[s] to know” (10) about a wonderful place that they will go when they die.

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Homework paragraph with “”

What was life like on the farm?

Analyze      -animals

                    -after rebellion

                   -better

BS              

A animals hold the farm

mr jones gone, humans disappeared

                             leader changed

B unity of animals

Animalism

equality

cooperating

                   C more freedom

move around freely, no chains, no halters, no saddles no one slaughtered

                             no work on Sunday

          Life on the farm after the rebellion was much better for the animals.  First of all, with Mr Jones and the other farmhands gone, the animals were able to take over leadership of the farm for themselves.  In fact, the animals were very excited that the farm was now “all their own” (14) after they got rid of the humans.  Secondly, the animals felt united under the tenets of Animalism.  They agreed that “[a]ll animals are equal” (15) and that they should treat each other with respect, even the rats and rabbits.  After that, they enjoyed many new freedoms; for example, they no longer had to wear chains, harnesses or rings.  Also, they got Sundays off, which the animals had never had before.  Most importantly, no animals would be slaughtered by others.  All in all, the rebellion brought them a new sense of ownership, comradeship and liberty.