Good morning, everyone.
We’ll get started at 11:00.
Today is Hump
Day.
Today’s agenda:
·
Test#4 – paragraph on “Wise
Woman of Cordoba”
·
Continue essay work
·
Begin sentence combining
Thursday
·
Continue essay work
·
Sentence combining
Friday- end 12:45
·
Optional replacement test, last
hour of class
Final week
Monday
·
finish essay prep
Tuesday
·
Final essay, whole class
Wednesday – June 29th- final day
·
NO TEACHING, NO INSTRUCTION
·
Marks day, final reports
Test#4
Paragraph (150-200 ww)
Please, don’t just tell me the story.
Please don’t copy from the story.
Address the question.
Submit by 12:10.
Why was
the Wise Woman put into jail?
Break until 12:20
SENTENCES:
simple
compound complex
Next
level of work for sentence writing
Sentence
combining
-very
effective way to get better at sentence writing
-practical,
useful
IMO
(in my opinion)- the best way to get better at sentence writing
-at
all levels – absolute beginner, beginner, intermediate, developing, advanced,
expert
start
basic level----- very high university-level exercises
Based
on the sentence styles- simple, compound, complex
foundation
of all writing and speaking in English
sentence
combining – puts all of this knowledge into use
William
Strong – university professor – taught university students how to be better
writers, not ESL EAL
o
more prestigious English
o
beautiful, elegant, stylish writing
o
sound good, read well, smooth
to read
GOALS
-sentences
that are dense with information, but not too much (tricky balance)
-sentences
that are as compact as possible (short, few words as possible)
***
balancing competing impulses- lots of information, short sentences
*PERSONAL
ANECDOTE*
My
first year in university-
My
story learned how to write well by working with Style books.
The Elements of Style Strunk and White
Style: Ten Levels in Clarity
and Grace Williams
*Changed my world
Beginner
level sentence combining – good for a little kid
Joe has a hat.
The
hat is red.
The
hat is for baseball.
1.
Choose the important elements in each sentence
2.
Combine all of the element together into on sentence- simple, compound, complex
Joe has a hat. KERNEL – centre, hub
Usually the first sentence in an exercise
FIND
NEW INFORMATION IN THE OTHER SENTENCES
The
hat is red.
The
hat is for baseball.
ELEMENTS
to be combined
Joe has a hat.
red
baseball
Choose
what kind of sentence do you want to write to include all of these elements? simple
compound complex?
-gut
reaction, trust your instinct, feeling
SIMPLE
Joe
has a red baseball hat. MY CHOICE
Joe
has a red hat for baseball.
COMPOUND
Joe
has a red hat, and it is for baseball. SEEMS LIKE TOO MUCH FOR SUCH A BASIC
IDEA
Joe
has a red hat; in fact, it is for baseball. SEEMS OVERWRITTEN
COMPLEX
Joe
has a baseball hat that is red. ADJ CL
Overwritten?
because since
SEEMS LIKE A LOT
Joe
has a red hat which is for baseball.
NOTE:
prefix is the beginning part of a word ‘un’ unkind ‘im’ impossible
suffix
is the end part of a word ‘tion’
education ‘ment’ employment
**
Two
approaches to putting sentences together:
1.
COORDINATION – prefix ‘co’ together
coworker, cooperate, combine, colleagues, collaboration, coparent,
coordinate, coordinator–
co- two things , same level
sentence – two clauses at the same level of importance
compound sentence– coordinated clauses
, SOBA , FANBOYS ; ;
TRANS,
Like a seesaw, teeter-totter
2.
SUBORDINATION- ‘sub’ under
submarine, subway, subconscious
Vietnamese
submarine sandwiches – Banh Mi Saigon, 5397 Victoria Drive- have one for
homework
subtract,
substitute, submission, submissive, subcontract
one
thing more important than the other
sentence
– two clauses not at the same level of importance
complex-
adverb clauses, noun clauses, adjective clauses
e.g.
Mae likes dogs because they are loyal. main clause subordinate
clause
main clause -more important information
subordinate clause- less important information
Dogs
are loyal, so I like them. COMPOUND
Dogs are loyal since they always stay
with their family.
This
is my visualization of sentences
1.
_______ SIMPLE
2.
___ ___
COMPOUND
3.
___
___ COMPLEX
*
It’s all about main and subordinate clauses
-looking
under the hood of a car
-looking
behind the curtain at Cirque de Soleil
-looking
in the kitchen of a restaurant
How
it’s done! How it’s made!
Tetris
– video game with blocks
-different
shapes
-all
the pieces fit together
Russian
Blocks
-
nice mix of sentence styles in our writing
-mix
of SIMPLE, COMPOUND and COMPLEX sentences
We
should aim for a nice mix of simple, compoiund and complex sentences. We should
aim for a mix of short, medium, and long sentences.
SIDE
NOTE
In
my editing business for university students, I write a mix of SIMPLE, COMPOUND
and COMPLEX sentences, with a few fancy details.
Therefore,
if you can master SIMPLE, COMPOUND and COMPLEX sentences, you’ll be set for any
class, college, university, job, etc.
Sentence
Combining Sheet #1
1.
a. The object looks long.
KERNEL
Find new information
b. The object looks thin.
c. The object measures about 8 inches in length.
The elements to be combined:
The object looks long
thin
measures about 8 inches in length
Decide
what kind of sentence would be most appropriate to include all these elements.
SIMPLE
The
object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in length. Not bad-
problem with parallelism
long, thin, and measures -
adj, adj, and verb
COMPOUND
The
object looks long and thin, and it measures about 8 inches in
length. small problem- two ‘ands’
The
object looks long and thin; also, it measures about 8 inches in length.
The
object looks long and thin, measuring about 8 inches in length. FANCY
The
object looks long, thin, and it measures about 8 inches in length.
need ‘and’
The
long object looks thin, and it measures about 8 inches in
length.
COMPLEX
-ADVERB
CL
The
object looks long
thin
measures
about 8 inches in length
-NOUN
CL
The
object looks long
thin
measures
about 8 inches in length
-ADJECTIVE
CL that which
The
object looks long
thin
measures
about 8 inches in length
The
object that/which measures about 8 inches in length looks long and thin.
adj cl
The
object that/which looks long and thin measures about 8 inches in length.
adj cl
We
have an excellent variety of sentences here.
SIMPLE
SIMPLE
The
object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in length.
parallelism
* parallelism
– same kind of words in a series, in a row
The
object looks long and thin. adj
Doris
likes hiking and swimming. n- gerunds
Doris
likes hiking and to swim. not parallel words- n v
FIX
Doris likes to hike and to swim.
The
object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in
length.
parallelism
adj adj verb
not parallel
The
object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in
length.
The
object looks long and thin. It measures about 8 inches in length.
The
long, thin object measures about 8 inches in length.
The
object, looks long and thin, measures about 8 inches in length. XXX
The
object, which looks long and thin, measures about 8 inches in length. COMPLEX-
adj cl
The
object looks long which measures about 8 inches in length, but it is
thin. XXX adj cl after a adj
We
want to put an adj cl after a noun.
The
object which measures about 8 inches in length looks long, but it is
thin.
My
sister is nice who is 37 years old. wrong place- misplaced modifier
My
sister who is 37 years old is nice.
GOALS
for sentence combining
1.
Create a variety of sentences-
stretch our ability, get comfortable with all three styles
2.
Balance content with
conciseness.
Include lots of information, but not too much, in a sentence.
Make the sentence as short as possible, but not too short.
Sentence
Combining Sheet 1
Email
me a couple exercises for homework. We will go over them tomorrow.
Proofreading
exercise- find ten errors
