EF3/4 Sentence combining "Technophobia"

1. Julia stared with fear and loathing at the blank screen in front of her; it was taunting her and reminding her of how much she hates computers.

Julia stared with fear. KERNEL
She stared at the screen. NEW INFORMATION
Julia stared with fear, and she stared at the screen. 
XXX Poor quality writing
Julia stared with fear at the screen. Good
Julia stared with fear and loathing at the blank screen that was blank. adjective/ adjective clause

Julia stared with fear and loathing at the blank screen in front of her. VERY HIGH QUALITY
The screen was in front of her.

Julia stared  at the blank screen in front of her with fear and loathing. GREAT ALTERNATE CHOICE

Julia who hates computers stared  at the blank screen in front of her with fear and loathing. EXCELLENT - COMPLEX SENT

Julia stared  at the blank screen in front of her with fear and loathing; it was taunting (her) and reminding her of how much she hates computers.

We built that sentence. Block by block, we created it.

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2. The test on computer literacy would be difficult, but she had to do well and did not want to fail.

She had to do the difficult test on computer literacy test well because she did not want to fail. COMPLEX

If she does well on the difficult test on computer literacy, she will not fail. COMPLEX

The test on computer literacy would be difficult, and she didn't want to fail, so she had to do well. 
COMPOUND

Could she do well and not fail the difficult computer literacy test? SIMPLE

3. She began timidly to peck at the key
board like a bird feeding on grain; as she developed rhythm and momentum, she felt her fear recede.

Sarah who felt her fear recede began timidly to peck at the keyboard like a bird feeding on grain; she developed rhythm and momentum.

Sarah who felt her fear recede began to develop rhythm and momentum as she timidly pecked at the keyboard like a bird feeding on grain.

Like a bird feeding on grain, she began timidly to peck at the keyboard, and her fear receded after she developed rhythm and momentum. 
COMPOUND COMPLEX SENT

Sarah began timidly to peck at the keyboard like a bird feeding on grain, and she developed rhythm and momentum; finally, she felt her fear recede.

COMPOUND

4. Quickly, she typed acceptable answers to questions that were displayed on the screen; the screen was an enemy robot that was trying to trick her.

5. The robot displayed her score of 82%; the robot was no longer threatening and now seemed more like a friend.

After the robot displayed her score of 82%, it was no longer threatening and now seemed more like a friend.


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