EF3/4 Sentence combining "Backstage"

Sentence combining

Build compact, concise, dense sentences
compact- concentrated
concise- lots of meaning, few words
dense - lots of meaning

first sentence - kernel 
We were preparing.

second sentence - new information
The preparation was for our performance.

We were preparing, and the preparation was for our performance. POOR WRITING, REPETITIVE

We were preparing for our performance.

third sentence - new information
The performance was our second.

We were preparing for our second performance.

of our play

We were preparing for our the second performance of our play.

The dressing room was in a state.
in a state - very messy, confused, upset (idiom)

We were preparing for the second performance of our play, and the dressing room was in a state. COMPOUND
We were preparing for the second play performance, so the dressing room was in a state. COMPOUND
We were preparing in the dressing room, which was in a state, for the second performance of our play. COMPLEX - adj cl
The dressing room was in a state because we were preparing for the second performance of our play.
COMPLEX - adv cl

EASY
I bought a coat.
The coat is red.
The coat is warm.

2. Racks that were for costumes and trays that were for makeup were scattered around the room.
MORE CONCISE
Racks for costumes and trays for makeup were scattered around the room.

EVEN MORE CONCISE
Costume racks and makeup trays were scattered around the room. SIMPLE

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3. Nearly everyone was nervous while helpers were dressing cast members apply their makeup.
Helpers were dressing cast members who applied their makeup, and everyone was nervous.
4. The female lead could not get her wig to stay on properly, and the male lead was having a tug-of-war with a pair of suspenders that would not cooperate.

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