E11 paragraph

125 words
paragraph or two
a page and a quarter

Topic sentence - 


Question?

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Topic sentence missing - not passing mark

TOPIC/ WRITING PROMPT
Discuss how Jung Sum hides his feelings throughout his life.

TOPIC SENTENCE- address the writing prompt

Jung Sum tends to hide his feelings/ is secretive about himself/ doesn't show his emotions to others/ from others because of some difficulties he has had in his life.

TOPIC SENTENCE- paragraph on topic
helps the reader to understand what your writing about
TECHNIQUES - mirror the vocab from the writing prompt- use some of the same words
                        - use synonyms