EF 5/6 Sentence Combining "Parable 2"

Find the most important new parts of the sentences.

Combine them together into one good sentence:
SIMPLE, COMPOUND, COMPLEX

Avoid repetition.


2. The birds dip and soar in the chill wind, and their wings are extended as they swoop to earth together.

The birds dip and soar in the chill wind; also, their wings are extended as they swoop to earth together.

The birds whose wings are extended dip and soar in the chill wind as they swoop to earth together.

The birds whose wings are extended (adj cl) dip and soar in the chill wind as they swoop to earth together (adverb cl). COMPLEX- VERY HIGH LEVEL

The birds dip and soar in the chill wind with their extended wings; then they swoop to earth together.

COMPOUND

3. They are just in time for Flying School which tries to teach them about boats, docks, and survival. SERIES

They are just in time for Flying School which tries to teach them about boats, docks and survival.

xxx, yyy, and zzz. OXFORD COMMA - YOUR CHOICE

The little kids like cheese sandwiches, ham sandwiches, and peanut butter and jam sandwiches. HELPS TO MAKE IT LESS CONFUSING- SIMPLE

They are just in time for Flying School because it tries to teach them about boats, docks and survival. TELLS US WHY- COMPLEX

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SUPER-DUPER IMPORTANT

!!!SIMPLE, COMPOUND, COMPLEX!!!

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4. An old bird advises them, "Stay close to shore, and watch for human trash that drifts in with the waves." COMPOUND

An old bird advises them to stay close to shore, and watch for human trash that drifts in with the waves.SIMPLE

Her mom told her, "Come home after work."

Her mom told her to come home after work.

SIMPLE

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She said, "I read 'Trial in the Bank Saloon' yesterday."

She said that she read "Trial in the Bank Saloon" yesterday. EASIER, LOOKS CLEANER

She said, "Watch out for the bear!"

5. The gulls flap/ are flapping their wings restlessly, but their instructor reminds them that they should forget their dreams.

The gulls flap their wings restlessly because their instructor reminds them that they should forget their dreams. CONSEQUENCE, COMPLEX

The gulls' instructor reminds them that they should forget their dreams, so they flap their wings restlessly. COMPOUND

The gulls' instructor reminds them to forget their dreams, so they flap their wings restlessly. NICE VARIATION, GOOD CHOICE

VARIETY- DIFFERENT STYLES, GOOD MIX OF SENTENCES

6. The instructor adds, "Gulls must live in flocks close to the docks."

The instructor adds that gulls must live in flocks  and close to the docks.

7. "Gulls cannot fly high and free above the open and rolling sea."

8. As the class follows the teacher searching for breakfast, one bird lags behind and remembers a private dream.

The class follows the teacher to search for breakfast, but one bird that remembers a private dream lags behind.

to search = infinitive to searched, to searches, to searching