E10/ EF7 Incorporating quoted material into your writing

INCORPORATE, MIX

IN POST-SECONDARY, MULTIPLE TEXTS

Animal Farm, Ch1, Q1

What is your first impression of Mr. Jones of Manor Farm?

PROCESS

1.Analyze

2.Generate ideas, 3-4 points

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3.Organize

1.drunk

“too drunk to remember” (1)

2.cruel

“drowns” (5)

dogs

3.violent

shot his gun

“seized the gun” (8)

4.Rough copy

            A reader’s first impression of Mr. Jones would be that he is not a nice man.  First, he obviously has a drinking problem; in fact, at times he is “too drunk to remember” (1) to take care of his animals.  Also, Old Major tells us that is a cruel man with the animals; for example, he takes dogs that have outlived their usefulness and “drowns them” (5) without thinking about their lives.  Finally, he is a violent man. Whe he hears a commotion in the barn, he shoots his gun out of the window. In conclusion…   

BORROW, CITING

INCORPORATING- GRAMMATICAL

First, he obviously has a drinking problem: “too drunk to remember” (1)

NO GOOD, NOT A SENTENCE, NOT GRAMMATICAL

“He seized the gun which always stood in a corner of his bedroom” (8)

COPYING

Mr Jones “seized the gun” (8) and shot it out the bedroom window. INCORPORATED

Old Major said that the animals’ lives were “miserable, laborious and short.” (3)

Old Major told the other animals that they could improve their “miserable, laborious and short ” (3) lives.