Good
morning, everyone.
We
will get started at 8:30
Al
Haley ahaley@vsb.bc.ca
Class
blog: haleyshec.blogspot.com
We
are in our final push!
·
Quiz – sentence combining
Quiz- 6 sentences
·
Parallelism
·
HW Read “Penny
in the Dust” for Monday. Make appropriate
notes for the Thought
Questions
Quiz #6- Submit it to me by 9:10.
Friday
Last two weeks -First
Nations
-sentence
combining
-five-paragraph
essay
How I read a story:
First, read it in a comfortable chair. Get the basics:
setting, milieu, character, plot, conflict.
Second, read it at a desk. Look deeper: symbol, theme, conflict,
dynamic character, plotline-climax, literary devices.
“Parallelism”
- having the same kinds of words in a series
series - A, B,
and C. Oxford comma, bit old-fashioned
series A, B
and C. no Oxford comma, more modern
series- A and B.
A, B and C ABC- all
be the same kind of words e.g. nouns, adjectives, gerunds, adverbs
She sings melodically and powerfully. adverbs
Her voice is melodic and powerful. adjectives
She sings melodically and powerful. XXX not parallel
Maria loves snowboarding and to hike. XXX
Maria loves snowboarding and hiking. parallel
Maria loves to snowboard and to hike. parallel
Maria loves to cook and (to) eat.
Maria loves to cook and loves to eat. overwritten
Dave has a luxury car, an expensive watch, and
a flashy suit. parallel
article adjective noun
Dave has a luxury car, an expensive watch, and
a suit. Not as good
Feels like something is missing.
DIFFERENT STYLE:
Maria runs while she hikes.
Parallelism
Parallelism is a higher-level
aspect of writing style. Parallelism means using words and phrases that are
similar or in structure or form. This technique adds symmetry, strength, and
balance to your writing.
Words, phrases, and clauses
have to go together, just like clothes. If they don’t go together well, they
clash. When your writing clashes with itself, readers lose confidence in you.
When they lose confidence in you, they stop reading.
Make sure lists of words,
series of phrases match within your sentences:
1. word forms for words in a
series. Adjectives go with adjectives, nouns go with nouns, verbs go with
verbs- INCLUDING TENSE! This is also true for adjective/noun combinations.
2. prepositional phrases
3. clauses. Independent
clauses in compound sentences often
sound better when they are parallel.
A few examples of parallelism within
sentences:
1. You need to work quickly
and decisively.
2. Like father, like son.
3. This is not only just what
I wanted, but also just what I needed.
parallelism – mirroring
4. Congress needs to either
reduce spending or raise taxes.
5. She is sneaky and
manipulative. both adjectives
6. In the parade the Boy
Scouts presented the colors, the band marched, and the mayor rode
in a convertible. SV(past tense)
7. Mother was very busy gathering
the laundry, dusting the furniture and washing the dishes. parallel-
same style, good repetition
8. To survive, you need water,
to eat, and shelter. XXX
To survive, you need water, food, and shelter.
To survive, you need to drink water, to eat food, and to
make a shelter.
rhythmic repetition
EASIER EXERCISES
1. The understudy had bright green eyes, a
great mass of blonde hair, and a red face.
2. When winter comes the Joneses will have
to find either a warmer house or a wood stove.
article
adjective noun
3. When
Moe was in high school, his parents spent a good deal of time not only
helping him with his homework assignments but also they participated
participating with him in school activities.
He not only plays
soccer but also (plays) baseball.
not
only...but also – fancy replacement for ‘and’
He plays
soccer and baseball.
He plays soccer;
also, he plays baseball. COMPOUND
4. It is better to be happy
than being sad. adj vf
It is better
to be happy than to be sad.
It is better
to be happy than sad.
It is better
to be happy than be sad. XXX
It is easier
to take your car than take a bus to North Van.
It is easier
to be organized than disorganized in your school work.
5. The
word for ‘left’ means "deceitful" in Italian, "awkward " in
German, "malicious" in Spanish, and Russians define its meaning as
"sneaky."
The word for ‘left’ means "deceitful" in
Italian, "awkward " in German, "malicious" in Spanish, and ‘sneaky’
in Russian.
IDIOM a left-handed
idea – a terrible idea
stutter-
stammer- cannot speak smoothly at times, trip over words
6. The contract was illegible, lengthy, and it
is awkward.
7. To think that you can do anything
is deceiving yourself.
Thinking that you can do anything is deceiving
yourself.
To think that you can do anything is to deceive
yourself.
8. Aspiring
actors go to Hollywood to become stars and because they want to
make money.
9. The
tourists amused themselves by playing shuffleboard, watching plays,
and they went going to trendy restaurants in the center of the
city.
10. Before
you order anything, you should not only check with the purchasing agent but
also the comptroller.
Before you order anything, you should check not only with
the purchasing agent but also the comptroller.
11. The radiologist examined the MRI (both) carefully
and with competence competently. adv
competent(a)-
have the skills and knowledge to do a task, capable
12. Please return the medical records either to
Dr. Jones or (to) Dr. MacIntyre.
13. This sofa is better for longevity,
for appearance, and it is comfortable and for comfort.
This sofa is
better for comfort and appearance.
longevity-
last a long time
iPhones are
very expensive, but they do not have good longevity.
14. Succeeding
at something is not necessarily the same as to get getting what
you need.
15. The process seemed to Beth both a bore
boring and annoying.
The process
seemed to Beth both a bore and an annoyance.
This is
annoying. This is an annoyance.
Taken from
https://webapps.towson.edu/ows/modulePARALLELposttestPrintable.htm
MORE CHALLENGING EXERCISES
1. The English teacher spoke in a nasal
tone, unpleasantly, but conveying the information clearly and was funny.
2. The coach told his players that they
should get plenty of water, to not eat sugary snacks, and being sure they are
getting plenty of sleep.
3. Benefits of coaching include: knowing
each player, helping that player to improve and to get to see that person
succeed in life.
4. At the party, my sister helped us make
the cake, gathering the kids for games, clean up and to drive some kids home.
5. Exercises that I enjoy doing are
marathon running, to swim lengths in a pool, riding my bicycle in the park, and
to walk along the trails in a forest.
6. We must either change the laws about
drunk driving or it will be necessary to start enforcing them more strictly.
7. The protestors were gathering outside,
held signs, starting to shout loudly and stopped the speaker from being heard.
8. My sister-in-law loves fad diets and
has tried: eating only meat, to not eat anything but rice, smoothies every
morning while not restricting anything else, and fasting 12 hours a day.
9. To my horror, my wedding dress looked
stained, torn and it had wrinkles.
10.
Our
latest math instructor was enthusiastic, cracked a lot of jokes,
is demanding, and failed half the
class.
English Foundations 5/6
Good morning, everyone.
We will get started at 8:30
Al Haley ahaley@vsb.bc.ca
Class blog: haleyshec.blogspot.com
We are in our final push!
Today’s agenda
·
Quiz – sentence combining
Quiz- 6 sentences
·
Parallelism
·
HW Read “Penny
in the Dust” for Monday. Make appropriate
notes for the Thought
Questions
Quiz #6- Submit it to me by 9:10.
Friday
Last two weeks -First
Nations
-sentence
combining
-five-paragraph
essay
How I read a story:
First, read it in a comfortable chair. Get the basics:
setting, milieu, character, plot, conflict.
Second, read it at a desk. Look deeper: symbol, theme, conflict,
dynamic character, plotline-climax, literary devices.
“Parallelism”
- having the same kinds of words in a series
series - A, B,
and C. Oxford comma, bit old-fashioned
series A, B
and C. no Oxford comma, more modern
series- A and B.
A, B and C ABC- all
be the same kind of words e.g. nouns, adjectives, gerunds, adverbs
She sings melodically and powerfully. adverbs
Her voice is melodic and powerful. adjectives
She sings melodically and powerful. XXX not parallel
Maria loves snowboarding and to hike. XXX
Maria loves snowboarding and hiking. parallel
Maria loves to snowboard and to hike. parallel
Maria loves to cook and (to) eat.
Maria loves to cook and loves to eat. overwritten
Dave has a luxury car, an expensive watch, and
a flashy suit. parallel
article adjective noun
Dave has a luxury car, an expensive watch, and
a suit. Not as good
Feels like something is missing.
DIFFERENT STYLE:
Maria runs while she hikes.
Parallelism
Parallelism is a higher-level
aspect of writing style. Parallelism means using words and phrases that are
similar or in structure or form. This technique adds symmetry, strength, and
balance to your writing.
Words, phrases, and clauses
have to go together, just like clothes. If they don’t go together well, they
clash. When your writing clashes with itself, readers lose confidence in you.
When they lose confidence in you, they stop reading.
Make sure lists of words,
series of phrases match within your sentences:
1. word forms for words in a
series. Adjectives go with adjectives, nouns go with nouns, verbs go with
verbs- INCLUDING TENSE! This is also true for adjective/noun combinations.
2. prepositional phrases
3. clauses. Independent
clauses in compound sentences often
sound better when they are parallel.
A few examples of parallelism within
sentences:
1. You need to work quickly
and decisively.
2. Like father, like son.
3. This is not only just what
I wanted, but also just what I needed.
parallelism – mirroring
4. Congress needs to either
reduce spending or raise taxes.
5. She is sneaky and
manipulative. both adjectives
6. In the parade the Boy
Scouts presented the colors, the band marched, and the mayor rode
in a convertible. SV(past tense)
7. Mother was very busy gathering
the laundry, dusting the furniture and washing the dishes. parallel-
same style, good repetition
8. To survive, you need water,
to eat, and shelter. XXX
To survive, you need water, food, and shelter.
To survive, you need to drink water, to eat food, and to
make a shelter.
rhythmic repetition
EASIER EXERCISES
1. The understudy had bright green eyes, a
great mass of blonde hair, and a red face.
2. When winter comes the Joneses will have
to find either a warmer house or a wood stove.
article
adjective noun
3. When
Moe was in high school, his parents spent a good deal of time not only
helping him with his homework assignments but also they participated
participating with him in school activities.
He not only plays
soccer but also (plays) baseball.
not
only...but also – fancy replacement for ‘and’
He plays
soccer and baseball.
He plays soccer;
also, he plays baseball. COMPOUND
4. It is better to be happy
than being sad. adj vf
It is better
to be happy than to be sad.
It is better
to be happy than sad.
It is better
to be happy than be sad. XXX
It is easier
to take your car than take a bus to North Van.
It is easier
to be organized than disorganized in your school work.
5. The
word for ‘left’ means "deceitful" in Italian, "awkward " in
German, "malicious" in Spanish, and Russians define its meaning as
"sneaky."
The word for ‘left’ means "deceitful" in
Italian, "awkward " in German, "malicious" in Spanish, and ‘sneaky’
in Russian.
IDIOM a left-handed
idea – a terrible idea
stutter-
stammer- cannot speak smoothly at times, trip over words
6. The contract was illegible, lengthy, and it
is awkward.
7. To think that you can do anything
is deceiving yourself.
Thinking that you can do anything is deceiving
yourself.
To think that you can do anything is to deceive
yourself.
8. Aspiring
actors go to Hollywood to become stars and because they want to
make money.
9. The
tourists amused themselves by playing shuffleboard, watching plays,
and they went going to trendy restaurants in the center of the
city.
10. Before
you order anything, you should not only check with the purchasing agent but
also the comptroller.
Before you order anything, you should check not only with
the purchasing agent but also the comptroller.
11. The radiologist examined the MRI (both) carefully
and with competence competently. adv
competent(a)-
have the skills and knowledge to do a task, capable
12. Please return the medical records either to
Dr. Jones or (to) Dr. MacIntyre.
13. This sofa is better for longevity,
for appearance, and it is comfortable and for comfort.
This sofa is
better for comfort and appearance.
longevity-
last a long time
iPhones are
very expensive, but they do not have good longevity.
14. Succeeding
at something is not necessarily the same as to get getting what
you need.
15. The process seemed to Beth both a bore
boring and annoying.
The process
seemed to Beth both a bore and an annoyance.
This is
annoying. This is an annoyance.
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