Good
morning, everyone.
We
will get started at 8:30
Al
Haley ahaley@vsb.bc.ca
Class
blog: haleyshec.blogspot.com
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Talk about Replacement quiz – end of this week
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Continue sentence combining
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HW Sentence
combining
Wednesday
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Return Test#3
Process-
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Sentences
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Sentence combining- your examples from homework
Thursday
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Quiz – sentence combining
Friday
Last two weeks -First Nations
-sentence combining
-five-paragraph
essay
** Optional replacement quiz **
A few people have asked me about rewriting
quizzes. Maybe they had a bad quiz or missed a quiz.
In my classes, I offer an optional replacement
quiz for anyone who would like to do that.
Next week, you will have an opportunity to
replace one of the quizzes that you wrote. This is optional. You don’t have to
do it if you don’t want.
As of today, we will have done five quizzes:
Quiz#1- simple sentences x/6
Quiz#2 – compound sentences x/6
Quiz#3- adverb clauses x/6
Quiz#4- noun clauses x/6
Quiz#5- adjective clauses x/6
You have the marks for those.
You may have one quiz that you were not
satisfied with.
You can replace one of those quizzes. You
choose which one and let me know be email.
One is one. Not two, not three. 1=1
You will do the replacement quiz during
regular class time, as usual. It will Monday, April 11. We will do it the last
25 minutes of class.
The replacement quiz will be a new quiz. The
replacement quiz will be a mix of all sentence styles.
e.g. If you want to replace your adverb
clause quiz, the replacement will not just be on adverb clauses; it will be on
all of the clauses.
The replacement quiz will be six sentences,
as usual- mix of simple, compound, complex.
Your old mark will be replaced with the new
mark. It will not be the higher of the two marks.
EXAMPLE SCENARIO #1
Q1 4/6
Q2 0/6 4/6 *
Q3 6/6
Q4 5.5/6
Q5 5/6
Replace Q2.
Replacement quiz 4/6
*Great outcome.*
EXAMPLE SCENARIO #2
Q1 4/6 3/6 *
Q2 4.5/6
Q3 4.5/6
Q4 5/6
Q5 4.5/6
Replace Q1.
Replacement quiz 3/6
*Less-than-ideal outcome*
Think about if you would like to replace one
of your quiz marks.
If you have pretty good marks, just leave
them. Don’t bother with the replacement quiz.
EXAMPLE SCENARIO #3
Q1 2/6
Q2 1.5/6
Q3 0/6 3.5/6
Q4 0/6
Q5 2/6
Q3 or Q4- you decide Q3
Replacement quiz 3.5/6
REMINDER: Quizzes are worth about 30% of your
final mark.
What you can do:
Email me by Thursday at 1PM which quiz you
would like to replace, if you want to replace one.
Send me an email.
Make sure you use a proper Subject line in
your email:
“Name, Class, Replacement quiz.”
“Hi Al,
I want to replace Quiz#2.
Thanks,
Betty”
I will respond.
“Ok. Thanks.
Al”
I will not accept
late emails. Thursday at 1pm is the deadline to let me know if you want to
replace a quiz. You have 52 hours.
We will also do a
replacement test (paragraph) as well. I will talk about this next week. It will
be the same structure as the replacement quiz. We will do the replacement test
in the final week.
Next level of work for sentence writing
Sentence combining
-very effective way to get better at sentence writing,
practical, useful
IMO (in my opinion)- the best way to get better at sentence
writing
-at all levels – very beginner, intermediate, developing,
advanced, expert
start basic level----- very high university level exercises
Based on the sentence styles- simple, compound, complex
foundation of all writing and speaking in English
sentence combining – puts all of this knowledge into use
William Strong – university professor – taught uni students
how to be better writers, not ESL EAL
- more prestigious English – beautiful, elegant, stylish
-sound good, read well, smooth to read
GOALS
-sentences that are dense with information, but not too much
(tricky balance)
-sentences that are as compact as possible (short, few words
as possible)
*** balancing competing impulses- lots of information, short
sentences
*PERSONAL ANECDOTE*
Eng 11/12/College level
My story learned how to write well by working with Style
books.
The Elements of Style Strunk and White
Style: Ten
Levels in Clarity and Grace Williams *Changed my world
Beginner level sentence combining
Joe has a hat.
The hat is red.
The hat is for baseball.
1. Choose the important elements in each sentence
2. Combine all of the element together into on sentence-
simple, compound, complex
Joe has a hat. KERNEL – centre, hub Usually the first
sentence in an exercise
FIND NEW INFORMATION
The hat is red.
The hat is for baseball.
ELEMENTS to be combined
Joe has a hat.
red
baseball
Choose what kind of sentence do you want to write to include
all of these elements? simple compound complex?
-gut reaction, trust your instinct, feeling
SIMPLE
Joe has a red baseball hat. MY CHOICE
Joe has a red hat for baseball.
COMPOUND
Joe has a red hat, and it is for baseball. SEEMS LIKE TOO
MUCH FOR SUCH A BASIC IDEA
Joe has a red hat; in fact, it is for baseball. SEEMS
OVERWRITTEN
COMPLEX
Joe has a baseball hat that is red. ADJ CL Overwritten?
because since SEEMS LIKE A LOT
NOTE: prefix is the beginning part of a word ‘un’ unkind
‘im’ impossible
suffix is the end part of a word ‘tion’ education ‘ment’ employment
Two approaches to putting sentences together:
1.
COORDINATION – prefix ‘co’ together
coworker, cooperate, combine, colleagues,
colaboration, coparent, coordinate–
co- two things , same level
sentence – two clauses at the same level of
importance
compound sentence– coordinated clauses
, SOBA
, FANBOYS ; ;
TRANS,
2.
SUBORDINATION- ‘sub’ under
submarine, subway, subconscious
Vietnamese submarine sandwiches – Banh Mi Saigon, 5397 Victoria
Drive- have one for homework
subtract, substitute, submission, submissive, subcontract
one thing more important than the other
sentence – two clauses not at the same level of importance
complex- adverb clauses, noun clauses, adjective clauses
e.g. Mae likes dogs because they are loyal. main
clause subordinate clause
main clause -more imprtant information
subordinate clause- less important information
Dogs are loyal, so I like them. COMPOUND
Dogs are loyal since they always stay with their
family.
This is my visualization of sentences
1.
_______ SIMPLE
2.
___ ___ COMPOUND
3.
___
___
COMPLEX
* It’s all about main and subordinate clauses
-looking under the hood of a car
-looking behind the curtain at Cirque de Soleil
-looking in the kitchen of a restaurant
How it’s done! How it’s made!
Solo over A major
A Bm E7 A
Tetris – video game with blocks
-different shapes
-all the pieces fit together
Russian Blocks
- nice mix of sentence styles in our writing
-mix of SIMPLE, COMPOUND and COMPLEX sentences
SIDE NOTE
In my editting business, I write a mix of SIMPLE, COMPOUND
and COMPLEX sentences, with a few fancy details.
Therefore, if you can master SIMPLE, COMPOUND and COMPLEX sentences,
you’ll be set for any class, college, university, job, etc.
Sentence Combining Sheet #1
1.
a. The object looks long. KERNEL
Find new information
b. The object looks thin.
c. The object measures about 8 inches in
length.
The elements to be combined:
The object looks long. KERNEL
thin
measures about 8 inches in length
Decide what kind of sentence would be most appropriate to
include all these elements.
SIMPLE
The object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in
length. parallelism
COMPOUND
The object looks long, thin, and it measures about 8 inches
in length. X
The object looks long and thin, and it measures about 8
inches in length. two ‘ands’
The object looks long and thin; also, it measures about 8
inches in length.
The object looks long and thin, measuring about 8 inches in
length. FANCY
COMPLEX
-ADVERB CL
The object looks long
thin
measures about 8 inches in length
-NOUN CL
The object looks long
thin
measures about 8 inches in length
-ADJECTIVE CL that which
The object looks long
thin
measures about 8 inches in length
The object that/which measures about 8 inches in length looks
long and thin. adj cl
The object that/which looks long and thin measures
about 8 inches in length. adj cl
We have an excellent variety of sentences here.
SIMPLE
SIMPLE
The object looks long, thin, and measures about 8 inches in
length.
parallelism
* parallelism – same kind of words in a series, in a row
The object looks long and thin. adj
Doris likes hiking and swimming. n- gerunds
Doris likes hiking and to swim. not parallel
words- n v
FIX Doris likes to hike and to swim.
The object looks long, thin, and measures
about 8 inches in length.
parallelism adj
adj verb not parallel
The object looks long, thin, and measures
about 8 inches in length.
The object looks long and thin. It measures
about 8 inches in length.
The long, thin object measures about 8
inches in length.
The object, looks long and thin, measures about 8 inches in
length. XXX
The object, which looks long and thin, measures about 8
inches in length. COMPLEX- adj cl
The object looks long which measures about 8 inches in
length, but it is thin. XXX adj cl after a adj
We want to put an adj cl after a noun.
The object which measures about 8 inches in length looks
long, but it is thin.
My sister is nice who is 37 years old. wrong place-
misplaced modifier
My sister who is 37 years old is nice.
GOALS for sentence combining
1.
Create a variety of sentences- stretch our ability, get
comfortable with all three styles
2.
Balance content with conciseness.
Include lots of information, but not too
much, in a sentence.
Make the sentence as short as possible, but
not too short.
Sentence Combining Sheet 1
Email me some for homework. We will go over them tomorrow.
Proofreading exercise- find ten errors
Daily Idioms:
-Strike while the iron is hot. take your opportunities, don’t
wait, don’t let chances go to waste
-Opportunity knocks. same meaning Open the door- let opportunity in.
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