Comm 11/12 Short writing- short answer

paragraph form -a couple of paragraphs, a few

break up your writing into paragraphs

indent

INDENT at the beginning of each paragraph
double-space
pen, not pencil (black gets higher marks)

Begin with a topic sentence- begins the paragraph, start strong so the reader has confidence in you
topic sentecne - refer specifically to the topic
topic is the question, gives the controlling idea, use a predictor


"Was the Man in Motion tour a success? Why or why not?"

Yes, it was.

VERY SIMPLE BUT EFFECTIVE TOPIC SENTENCE
The Man in Motion tour was a success because of three reasons.

Don't use this as a template every time.

Look at your first sentence. Did you give topic, controlling idea, predictor (optional)

"In my opinion...." CUT CUT CUT
In academic writing, avoid first person, "I".

Get right to the topic.

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Topic sentence

Academic writing
(culturally based)
Topic sentence
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foundation of academic writing in the NA is argument
"ARGUMENT"

Topic sentence
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Concluding sentence (optional)- restatement of the Topic sentence  REPEAT
say the same thing but in different words
challenging - vocab, synonyms, thesaurus


Begin with a little intro sentence- bio, history, quotation, 

Possible approaches to finding a Grabber:

          General to specific statement

          Fact or statistic

          Anecdote- short personal story

          Historical

          Question?

          Adage, idiom, expression

          Famous quotation from famous person

Grabber
Topic sentence
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Concluding sentence



Sentences- 
Sentences have to be SIMPLE, COMPOUND, or COMPLEX. If not, it's not English.

Translating from mother tongue.

"You think in Farsi."
You must write in English- SIMPLE, COMPOUND, COMPLEX

One of the best to improve and expand your sentence writing is sentence combining.

EF4/5 Picture Differences AB

1. moustache

beard
goatee
pencil moustache
five-o'clock shadow
stubble
handlebar moustache
mutton chops

2. curly hair, balding, white

silver, grey

straight hair, balding, black

blue rinse

sport coat, blazer, suit jacket must match the pants
vest

stickers

suitcase, not a briefcase

striped pants
checked pants

grid is for paper

plaid, rhymes with sad

umbrella

necktie, bowtie

crevat

the necktie is polka dot tie.

dalmation dog

EF4/5 Subject Verb Agreement 2

Exercise 7
1. Isabella's hair is shiny and black.
Isabella's hair is very short now. It is in a bob.
Isabella has bangs.
Isabella's hair has tight curls.
Isabella has an afro.

Isabella has a perm.

Isabella's hair is dyed pink.

Isabella is bald.

Fred is bald.
Fred is balding. He has thin hair.

Matin has a crew cut.

2. A lot of students hate/love school.
A lot of students is/are late today.


Can be singular or plural. Depends on the noun:
A lot of the paper is wet.
A lot of the papers are wet.
A lot of the books are wet.
Some of you are coming to the party.
Some of your hair is blue.

Some of the pizza is leftover.
Some of the pizzas are leftover.

Most of the people are happy to be here.
Most of the movie was boring.

All of the water is warm
All of the bottles are leaking.

20% of the people are absent today.
20% of your mark comes from in-class spoken work.

fraction
1/2 one half
3/4 three fourths, three quarters
5/8 five eighths
1/4 one fourth, one quarter
1/8 one eighth

1/2 a cup
1/4 of a litre
1/8 of a pint
1/2 a tsp teaspoon, tbsp tablespoon

5. $200 is a lot of money.

$200 = one amount

two hundred dollars = does not mean 200 separate dollars

loony = the bird is a loon
twony
It is a two-dollar coin.

loony = slang for crazy

25c quarter
10c dime
5c nickel
1c penny

$5 five bucks, old west slang, cowboy


loony = luna, la lun, the moon, lunar

full moon is a symbol of evil, something to be afraid of- vampire, werewolf

sun - masculine, male Apollo- sun god

very sexist

EF4/5 Paragraph on e-cigarattes

Smoking is popular between among teenagers.
People who do not smoke are called non-smokers.

Someone who smokes is called a smoker.

I don't think that smoking is a good idea.

NOUN CLAUSE
I don't think that using cigarettes is good for your health.

noun clauses- talk about next class

Every sentence has to be SIMPLE, COMPOUND, or COMPLEX.

singular and plural
Cigarettes are bad for our body bodies.
This These cigarettes are bad for our health.

Smoking is a bad habit.
I have many bad habits.

Cigarettes are very addiction addictive.

She has an addiction to internet.

She wants to stop smoking.
He stopped smoking.
She started working in the office last month.

Comm 11/12 Sentence combining Bungee Jumping

coincidence

1.The moment of truth arrived.
Max had felt raw panic.

panic attack - freak out

When the moment of truth arrived, Max had felt raw panic. COMPLEX -adverb clause

Max had felt raw panic when the moment of truth arrived.

The moment of truth arrived when Max had felt raw panic.

The moment of truth arrived, so Max had felt raw panic. COMPOUND

The moment of truth arrived, and Max had felt raw panic.

As/Because the moment of truth arrived, Max had felt raw panic.

FANCIER

The moment of truth arrived for Max, who felt raw panic. ADJ CL

commas usage is very personal- trust your judgement

2. He stood atop the bungee tower and felt a jackhammer in his chest. SIMPLE

He stood atop the bungee tower, feeling a jackhammer in his chest. VERY NATURAL

He stood atop the bungee tower, and he felt a jackhammer in his chest. COMPOUND

Feeling a jackhammer in his chest, he stood atop the bungee tower.

Standing atop the bungee tower, he felt a jackhammer in his chest. VERY HIGH QUALITY SENTENCE

3. His mind screamed one repeated thought, "What am I doing here?"

His mind screamed one repeated thought: "What am I doing here?" MORE ENERGY

His mind screamed one repeated thought--"What am I doing here?" DASH GIVES ENERGY

colons :

She has two kids: one boy and one girl.

Joe is taking three classes at SHEC: Comm 12, Eng 12, and Bio11.

hyphen -

dash -- (no break)

  

4. Far below was the parking lot where car windows glinted in the sun. COMPLEX-adj cl

Far below was the parking lot, car windows glinting in the sun. BEAUTIFUL SENTENCE

Car windows glinted in the sun far below in the parking lot. SIMPLE - direct, clear, strong, "masculine" sexist?

5. Traffic streamed by on the highway, a small plane droning in the distance.

Traffic streamed by on the highway where a small plane droned in the distance.

Traffic streamed by on the highway, and a small plane droned in the distance.

Traffic streamed by on the highway; meanwhile, a small plane droned in the distance.

6. Max squeezed his eyes shut, wishing he'd never accepted the dare.

Squeezing his eyes shut, he wished he'd never accepted the dare.

Max squeezed his eyes shut, and he wished that he'd never accepted the dare. NOUN CLAUSE

7,"You're eighteen, but you're going to die." he told himself. ?????

8. Then suddenly he was weightless and falling headlong toward earth.

 

Comm 11/12 Presentations for Thursday and Friday

Come to the front of the class., sit down or stand up.
Tell us about your person -six questions (structure)
4-5 minutes
Give me your paper.

Public speaking is nerve-wracking
Public speaking is #1 phobia- unreasonable fear


ADVICE for Public Speaking

1. Deaf grandmother
Speak up! Speak louder than usual. 

2. Good dog / Pretty baby
Energy. Enthusiasm. Performance

3. Statue
Stand your ground.

4. Indian princess
Eye contact. Pretend eye contact.

Comm11/12 Agenda for the next few days

Agenda
- sentence combining
-deaf percussionist
-prepare for presentations for tomorrow and Friday


For tomorrow, Thursday
-prepare your presentation if it is your day
-read "The Most Important Day"

Maybe tomorrow, maybe Friday
-walkthrough practice Comm 12 provincial exam

For Monday
read "Jonathan Livingston Seagull"