Writing work coming up: essay writing
April 1st- April Fools’ Day
fun day-
You can play a trick on somebody in the morning, until noon.
Tell a fib, tell a lie- trick somebody
April fools!
-a few hundred years old-
old calendar Europe- Julian Calendar- until late 1500s- New Years
Day –
end of March
new calendar- Gregorian Calendar- modern calendar- New Years
Day- January 1st
fun lie- fib
Today’s Agenda- April Fools Day
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Attendance
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Sentence combining work
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Animal Farm Chapter 5 -quick
Crossword, Thought Questions
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Quiz 2- short answer (final 35m)
Thursday, April 2
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Sentence combining work
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Animal Farm Chapter 6
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Begin essay work
Friday, April 3
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Statutory holiday
Good Friday
Monday, April 6
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Statutory holiday
Easter Monday
Tuesday, April 7
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Presentations 1
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Animal Farm Chapter
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Essay work
Wednesday, April 8
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Presentations 2
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Animal Farm Chapter
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Essay work
Thursday, April 9
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Presentations 3
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Animal Farm Chapter
Friday, April 10
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Presentations 4
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Animal Farm
Final week- essay, movie
Monday, April 13
Tuesday, April 14
Wednesday, April 15
Thursday, April 16
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Optional replacement quiz and/or test
Friday, April 17- final day
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One-on-one meetings, final marks and comments
Quarter 4 begins on Thursday, April 23rd.
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Sentence combining
Learned sentence types
SIMPLE
COMPOUND
COMPLEX
COMPOUND-COMPLEX
Essential sentence writing
Daily practice! Consistency. Slow and steady progress.
Everything is habit!
Sentence combining- take 3-4-5 short sentences, combine into
one
GOAL- dense clear sentences -balanced
dense- a lot of information in a few words as possible
clear- easy to read and understand
BEGINNER-LEVEL EXAMPLE:
a. Bill
felt hungry.
b. Bill
had no lunch today.
Two approaches:
1. coordinate
2. subordinate
+COORDINATION- ‘co’- together- cooperate, coworker,
colleague, collaboration
coordinated clauses- compound sentence
, SOBA ; ; TRANS,
a. Bill
felt hungry.
b. Bill
had no lunch today.
Bill felt hungry, so he had no lunch today. XXX
Bill had no lunch today, so he felt hungry.
Bill felt hungry, and he had no lunch today. Sound
good?
Bill had no lunch today, and he felt hungry. Sounds
better
Bill felt hungry; he had no lunch today.
Bill had no lunch today; he felt hungry.
Bill had no lunch today; therefore, he felt hungry.
Bill had no lunch today. Therefore, he felt hungry. 2
SIMPLES
Coordination is like a seesaw / teetertotter.
You can decide what kind of sentence you want. It is your
decision. You are in charge.
Make sure you choose.
+SUBORDINATION- ‘sub’- under- subway, subtitle,
subsitute, subcutaneous
subordinate clauses- complex sentence- adverb cl, noun cl,
adjective cl
a. Bill
felt hungry.
b. Bill
had no lunch today.
COMPLEX SENTENCE
Bill felt hungry because he had no lunch today. adv
cl
Bill felt hungry since/as he had no lunch today. adv
cl
Bill, who had no lunch today, felt hungry. adj cl
Bill, who felt hungry, had no lunch today. adj cl
Bill said that he felt hungry because he had no
lunch today. n cl adv cl
REMINDER:
Bill felt hungry because he had no lunch today. no
comma
Because Bill had no lunch today, he felt hungry.
comma
Bill thought that he was hungry because he had no
lunch today. n cl adv cl
Bill thought that he was hungry because he didn’t
have lunch today. n cl adv cl
Coordination and subordination
break fast
VOCAB breakfast- brunch – lunch - late lunch - early dinner-
afternoon tea(British) – dinner/supper - late dinner/supper - midnight snack
high tea- fancy tea and cookies, cakes- Victoria- fancy
hotel Empress Hotel-
Easy Sentence Combining Exercise
French Fries- pomme frite
pomme de terre- French ‘apple of the earth’
1. French fries are loaded into a basket.
2. The French fries are white.
3. The basket is wire.
1.
French fries are loaded into a basket. main
sentence- kernel
Look for new information in the following sentences. Avoid
repetition.
2. The French fries are white.
3. The basket is wire.
French fries are loaded into a basket, and the French fries
are white. XXX REPETITIVE- not good writing
White French fries are loaded into a basket. Good
French fries which are white are loaded into a basket.
Good? bit overwritten
French fries which are white are loaded into a basket
which is wire. Unwritten- too much going on
White French fries are loaded into a wire basket. Better.
Clear. Dense.
Dense and clear.
dense- lots of information in a short number of words
clear-easy to read
Rewrote- switch
A wire basket is loaded
with white French fries. passive voice verb
You sentence writing should be dense and clear. Also, it
must follow the sentence styles of English.
Voices in verbs- active voice, passive voice
active voice- most common- subject does the verb
She ate the chocolate.
passive voice- much less common- subject does not do the verb
The chocolate was
eaten.
The chocolate was
eaten by Fademah.
passive voice verb -longer and more complicate than active
voice
ate- simple past tense active voice
was eaten – simple past passive voice
FREE ADVICE- Avoid passive voice. It sounds weaker then active
voice.
It is also more complicated to write and harder to read.
Exceptions:
An old man was
run over by a car at Knight and 41st this morning. passive voice
A car ran
over an old man at Knight and 41st this morning. active voice
Something killed somebody in the park. XXX
Somebody was killed in the park. stronger
A teenager was killed in Central Park a few years ago.
The car was fixed by a mechanic.
An ice cream was eaten by us. XXX ineffective
We ate some ice cream.
I was stung by a bee. passive voice
A bee stung me. active voice
mosquito- sting
snake- bite a snake has fangs.
Let’s try some. Write the new combined sentence on your own
paper.
Write your new combined sentence on your own paper.
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Animal Farm Chapter 5 Notes
Mollie
increasingly disaffected
traitor,
consorting with Foxwood man, ribbons and sugar
disappears,
defector
hard
winter
pigs
planners
Snowball
and Napoleon, constant disagreement,
different camps
Snowball
brilliant speaker
Napoleon,
sheep followers, interrupt Snowball's speeches
Snowball
innovator, inventor
Napoleon-
biding his time, scheming
Windmill,
Snowball's dream for electricity, mechanization
Napoleon
pees on plans- rare bit of humour in novel
VOCAB
gainsay(v)- to disagree only because you don’t like that person
Napoleon
always gainsays Snowball.
animals-
two factions, except Benjamin
Napoleon-
train for defense
Snowball-
incite rebellion elsewhere
vote
about windmill- Snowball wins over animals with eloquence
Napoleon's
dogs run off Snowball, the puppies from Chapter 3
try
to kill Snowball, but Snowball escaped by the skin of his teeth
Napoleon
suspends Sunday meetings, cancels voting, only special committee of pigs- make
all the decisions
Animals
only “salute the flag” and sing “Beasts of England” (36) –ritualistic,
human-like behaviour
animals
inarticulate, unable to form coherent ideas
also
intimidated by the dogs
IDIOM You are chicken- scared
IDIOM I don’t have a dog in this fight. It‘s not my business/problem.
MY IDIOM Not my circus. Not my monkeys.
SLANG – a bit impolite
He has no balls. He is afraid, not brave.
Squealer
sent to spin Napoleon and smear Snowball
discredit
Snowball, call into question role in
raises
specter of Mr. Jones coming back
Squealer
persuades them, dogs growl at them
Quiz 2- short answer with
“ “
Choose one question. Write a well-organized short answer of
four to five sentences with quoted material, like we discussed yesterday.
1. Why
are the pigs the leaders of Animal Farm?
2. Describe
Boxer’s personality.
