Thursday, 4 August 2022

Eng 10 11 SUMMER 23 class- sentence combining, Final essay

 

Good morning.

We will get started at 8:30.

 

Today’s Agenda:

·      Return optional replacement quiz

·      Return optional business letter – completion mark: 2 pts

·      Sentence combining, your examples from homework

·      Reminder using quotations, quoting text

·      Final essay on First Nations- quoting from “Totem”

General topic on First Nations – opinion writing

opinion – a few reasons to support that opinion

e.g. Should First Nations history be taught in schools?

Essay  format- five-paragraph format good choice, IKEA essay

You can choose the format that makes most sense to you.

 

Introductory paragraph

Body paragraphs

Concluding paragraph

 

I will not have time to give feedback on your essay for tomorrow. I will read your essay and give it a a mark. If you want feedback as normal, I can do that in September. Find me around the school in September, and I will return to you your marked essay with feedback. I will keep your essay until September 15th.

 

·      OPTIONAL REPLACEMENT TEST FRIDAY- “The Ninny”

Read. Make notes. Paragraph with “ “

·      HW Deadline for email re optional replacement test is 3 pm today

 

Friday

NON-INSTRUCTIONAL DAY

·      Optional replacement test (first 60m)

·      Marking and assembling final marks

OPTION

One-on-one chats if you want

OR

Final marks by email- Email me by 11:30, I will email you your final mark back.

·      Final reports due in by 12 noon

 

 

 

These are some of your more advanced sentence combning solutions from the homework.

1.    The sailor who stands behind the wheel sails the ship. 

The sailor stands behind the wheel sailing the ship. 

 

2.    The years that were spent at sea have toughened his thick, chapped, and rough lips.

The years that were spent at sea have toughened his thick, chapped, rough lips.

 

3.    Toni took down the large sails which were used to catch light winds and hoisted other smaller sails for heavier weather.

Toni took down the large sails for light winds and hoisted other smaller sails for heavier weather. parallelism

Toni took down the large sails which were used to catch light winds and hoisted other smaller sails which were for heavier weather. parallelism

 

4.    The weather-bleached sloop sat in the sun for hours in the afternoon when while the crew searched the horizon for clouds and wind.

 

5.    Wallachen is a summer camp that teaches arts and crafts for six to twelve children.

Wallachen is a summer camp that teaches arts and crafts to six to twelve-year-old children.

Wallachen is a summer camp that teaches arts and crafts to children who are six to twelve years old.

 

6.    The children stay and sleep in log cabins or outdoors for a week without parents.

 

7.    The grimy train covered with graffiti pulled out of the station.

8.    The roller coaster that made its appearance in 1884 is still the most existing rides in an amusement park.

9.    The roller coaster, that which made its appearance in 1884, is still the most exciting ride in an amusement park.

The roller coaster, that which made its appearance in 1884, is still one of the most exciting rides in an amusement park.

 

10.                       Wallacheen is a children’s camp for six to twelve years old six to twelve-year-olds which operates in summer and teaches arts and crafts.

11.                       The children stay for a week without parents in log cabins which are made of logs, or sometimes they sleep outside.

 

12.                       The third car held five people, who were an old woman, her grandaughter, a middle aged man, and two young men.

 

 

13.                       The coaster starts slowly like a train pulling away from a station while the passengers who have waited in line for over an hour ready themselves for the first hill. complex – adv cl, adj cl

14.                       The train pulled out of the grimy station that was covered with graffiti.

 

15.                       The train hissed and screamed as it entered the darkness of the tunnel that headed downtown.

 

16.                       The train that headed downtown hissed and screamed as it entered the darkness of the tunnel.

 

17.                       The third car held five people: an old woman, her granddaughter, and a man.  How many people? confusion

 

 

18.                       The people were strangers who were suddenly thrown into a suddenly intimate situation.

19.                       The people were strangers thrown into a situation that was suddenly intimate.

20.                       The roller coaster, which made its appearance in 1884, is still one of the most exciting rides in an amusement park. non-essential adjective clause

21.                       The crowds line up to ride the roller coaster, even the newer and fancier rides that are like log flumes or screaming demons fail to draw them. RW

The crowds line up to ride the roller coaster; even the newer and fancier rides like log flumes or screaming demons fail to draw crowds like the rollercoaster. REP

Even the newer and fancier rides like log flumes and screaming demons fail to draw the crowds that line up to ride the roller coaster.

 

22.                       The young and old seem to enjoy the traditional favorite.

 

Good work. These were tougher exercises.

 

 

 

 

 

 

Essay, multi-paragraph writing (300-350 words)

 

Should newcomers to Canada learn about the history of First Nations Peoples?

 

Due by end of class

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