Good morning.
We will get started at 8:30.
Today’s Agenda:
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Sentence combining work from homework
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Continue First Nations module
“Totem”
·
Reminder using quotations, quoting text
·
Optional replacement quiz
·
HW Sentence
combining exercises. Email a couple or a few to
me.
Thursday
·
Return optional replacement quiz
·
Sentence combining
·
Final essay on First Nations- quoting
from “Totem” (2 hours)
General topic on First Nations – opinion
writing
opinion – a few reasons to support that
opinion
e.g. Should First Nations history be
taught in schools?
Essay format- five-paragraph format good choice,
IKEA essay
You can choose the format that makes
most sense to you.
Introductory paragraph
Body paragraphs
Concluding paragraph
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WORK RE OPTIONAL REPLACEMENT TEST
FRIDAY- Talk about “The Ninny”
·
HW Deadline for email re optional replacement
test is 3 pm
Friday
·
Optional replacement test (first 60m)
·
Final marks
OPTION
One-on-one meetings, chats if you want
OR
Final marks by email- Email me by
11:30, I will email you your final mark back.
·
Final reports in by 12 noon
Follow up articles on early human migration from
Africa to Europe:
https://www.science.org/content/article/how-europeans-evolved-white-skin
These are some examples of
your sentence combining solutions from homework:
NEXT LEVEL OF SENTENCE WRITING
KERNEL + new information
Two approaches to keep in
mind: coordination and subordination
1.
The work
proceeded quickly to the delight of the young supervisors. SIMPLE SV prepositional
phrases
2.
The workers were in
their truck waving goodbye to their young supervisors. SIMPLE
SV prepositional phrases gerund
Mei
walked on the beach listening to her music.
We
are in English class learning about sentence combining.
3.
They watched
intently that the workers unloaded power codes and a flexible, plastic hose.
They watched
intently as/while the workers unloaded power cords and a flexible plastic hose.
COMMAS with adjectives
Order of adjectives
Opinion Size
Age Shape Colour
Origin Material Purpose NOUN
adjectives in the same
category- ,
adjectives in different
categories- no,
a flexible plastic hose –
different categories
a beautiful, fat baby – same category,
opinion
a fat, beautiful baby
4.
The children eyes
was visibly widened because one worker handed a power saw to a
companion. vf
The
children eyes visibly widened
because one worker handed a power saw to a companion.
The
children eyes were visibly widened because one worker handed a power saw
to a companion. passive voice- sounds weak
5.
They saw the
workers who cut two holes for ventilation in the roof and pulled up the hose.
AWK
They saw the
workers cut two holes for ventilation in the roof and pull up the hose.
I saw you eat my sandwich.
He saw her open the box.
We watched the kid fall out
of the tree.
watch see observe notice
The scientist observed the
mother bird feed/feeding her chicks.
**Close to noun clause
We watched the kids play
baseball.
6.
Soon the workers
in their truck were waving goodbye to their young supervisors. SIMPLE
7.
Fresh winds
erupted from east in the evening, and it brought dark clouds, rain and power to
be needed.
Fresh
winds erupted from the east in the evening, and they brought dark clouds, rain
and needed/necessary power.
Fresh
easterly winds erupted in the evening which brought dark clouds, rain and needed/necessary
power.
8.
The yacht which
shuddered for two nights through heavy and
unsympathetic
seas rested finally the third night in a cove, which was protected.
The yacht, which shuddered
for two nights through heavy and
unsympathetic seas, rested
finally the third night in a cove which was protected.
The yacht shuddered for two
nights through heavy, unsympathetic seas, and on the third night, finally rested
in a protected cove.
---and finally rested in a protected
cove on the third night.
Excellent options. This is
faciility that we are looking for in our writing.
The goal is to be able to manipulate
our clauses. This is the ongoing challenge.
9.
His strong and
large hands, which can feel and control the ship’s
movement, are
on the wheel.
His large strong hands, which
are on the wheel, can feel and control the ship’s movement.
His large strong hands are on
the wheel, feeling and controlling the ship’s movement. , GERUND
We spent the day in the park,
playing volleyball and swimming.
BORING, BUT NECESSARY.
10.
His ship, which
has sails that are white and canvas, is big, so the sails catch and billow
in the breeze.
CONDENSE
His ship has large white canvas sails that catch and billow in the breeze.
His
ship’s large white canvas sails catch and billow in the breeze.
We have to make decisons
about each sentence. It takes time and energy, but it’s worth it in my opinion.
11.
The sailor is
going home that is in Halifax where his family is waiting.
The
sailor is going home to Halifax where his family is waiting.
The
sailor is going home to Halifax to his waiting family.
12.
It has been a
time that has been spent on the sea.
It
has been a long time that has been spent on the sea.
It
has been a long time spent on the sea.
13.
The sailor thinks
of his large house that is made of stone on a hill with a bay window, and it is
surrounded by green grass
that
reminds him the sea.
The sailor thinks of his
large house that is made of stone on a hill with a bay window, and it is
surrounded by green grass that reminds him of the sea.
CONDENSE The sailor thinks of
his large stone house on a hill with a bay window, which is surrounded by green
grass that reminds him of the sea.
TIGHTER, NEATER, CLEANER
14.
The sailor looks
to the shore and to his hill that is coming
into
view while he is coming home.
FANCIER STYLE- ELEGANT
Coming home, the sailor looks
to the shore and to his hill as they come into view.
Very good work. We have to
struggle with these a little bit. The struggle will pay off in growth.
I will photocopy a few more challenging exercises
that we can try for homework for tomorrow.
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twice
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three times
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“Totem”
Notes from homework based on the Thought Questions
from the other stories
Small group 4-5 people) discussion:
1.setting-
2.character
3.conflict
4.symbols
e.g totem pole, museum
light-hearted, humorous
genre of fiction- magical realism
genre- type of writing-
non-fiction: history,biography, autobiography, self-help
fiction: sci-fi (science fiction), romance, fantasy,
crime, horror
magical realism – very realistic with impossible
events
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movies- magic realism – Edward Scissorhands,
Life of Pi
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fiction – magic realism – Gabriel
Gracia Marquez 100 Years of Solitude
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