EF6 August 3

Good morning, everyone.

We will get started at 8:30.

Cameras on. Mics muted.

 

Registration for September:

https://moodle.vsb.bc.ca/fall.php

 

 

Today’s agenda

 

·      Begin essay work

·      Sentence combining work from homework IF TIME

 

Wednesday agenda

·      Continue with essay work

·      Phrasal verbs

·      Replacement test for the people who signed up for it. I will a CBC artcle for you to read in prepaeration for the replacement test.

 

Thursday agenda

·      Essay#1- only essay (2hrs)

I will have to mark these very quickly. I will not have time to correct sentences and grammar. I will give an overall mark out of 10 with a few notes.

 

Friday

·      Final day.

·      We will not have a regular class.

·      Email me after 9:30, and I will email you back your final mark.

·      I will be on Zoom to talk about or teach whatever.

·      I will be here doing your finals marks and report cards.

 

 

My classes for September:

EF6              Period 1

EF3/4          P2

 

 

 

SDV?

SSV

‘S’ and ‘D’ are next to each other on the keyboard, typo?

typographical error- typo

 

 

 

 

ESSAY WORK

sentences- variety sentences SIMPLE, COMPOUND, COMPLEX

                     -teach precision in clause use, punc, SV

 

*paragaraphs- format

                     - structure

Grabber

TS

Supporting sentences

CS

 

 

*essays – multiparagraph writing

 

IN POST-SEC

*papers- 10-20 pages

thesis 80-120 pages

 

*books- 200-500+ pages

 

 

*essays – multiparagraph writing

full treatment of a topic

paragraph – short, 150-200 words

 

essay – longer writing format

          -300+ words

 

Old Eng12 Provincial Exams:

“Using standard English, ... write a coherent, unified, multi-paragraph (3 or more paragraphs) composition of at least 300 words on the topic below. In your composition, you may apply any appropriate method of development including exposition, persuasion, description, and narration.”

multiparagraph – several paragraphs all focussed on the same topic

 

most fundamental model of an essay- five-paragraph essay (I emailed you some documents last week about essays. Hopefully you have reviewed those.)

 

-essay – 3,4,5,6,7 paragraphs- you have the freedom to choose how many pargarpahs you need

 

- teaching purposes- focus on 5-paragraph essay

 

Every teacher in Canada will recognize a five-paragraph essay, 3*5 essay

-effective, simple, fundamental style, not flashy, not fancy, “IKEA essay”

 

Five-paragraph – five paragraphs

 

five-layer bean dip – five layers

 

 

The five paragraphs of the five-paragraph essay

 

*Introductory paragraph- sets up the whole essay (3-5 sent)

-Grabber/Hook (7 ways)

-Thesis statement – same as a Topic Sentence, TS

-Preview of the three points

 

*Three body paragraphs (5-7 sent each)

-Three seperate paragraphs dealingwith the three points that were previewed in the IP.

 

*Concluding paragraph (3-5 sent)

-Restatement of the elements in the IP

-End with a clincher

 

300+ words

 

 

Bicycle essay

Structure

How does it look on the page?

Are these five paragraphs?

Are the paragraphs balanced in length?

like a sandwich – two pieces of bread

                               - essay sandwich – three things in the middle

 

What is the length? 300+ words    200 words too short, 900 words too long

-Goldilocks zone- not too short, not too long

 

– Are the paragaphs indented?

 

Content

Start to read through it.

Grabber

Where is the thesis statement? No TS, no essay

Previewed point

 

A well-constructed IP gives the reader confidence in you as a writer.

If parts are missing (eg. no Thesis statement), then the reader will lose confidnce in you as a writer. -low marks

 

Body –

 

Concluding paragarph - The conclusing paragraph is all about restatement. -saying the same things using different words, challenge to find vocabulary, synonyms,

Clincher – like a Grabber but at the end, ‘call to arms’, encouraging you to use the knowledge laid out in the essay

 

 

*The most important past of the essay is the Thesis Statement

 

 

Teacher will give a broad topic. You will narrow that topic down to something specific and managable that can write about in 300+ words.

 

Topic: Cycling

Huge topic- cycling- narrow it down to somthing specific and manageable

 

BRAINSTORM IDEAS

- bike lanes in Vancouver

- seperated lanes are a good ideaa

- bikes and cars not on the same road

 

-separated bike lanes – good idea

- city should create seperated bike lanes across Vancouver

-not paint on the road, real barriers between cars and bikes

1. safety- less risk of collisions with cars

2. encourage new cyclists, less nervous, growing #s of cyclists in the city

3. environmental – less smog, less smoke, less pollution, cleaner city, less congestion, less traffic

 

Thesis statement: Vancouver should construct a network of separated bike lanes that crisscross the city.

 

 

TOPICS:

1.    Food

2.    Noise pollution

3.    Living in the City

4.    Beauty

5.    A Happy Life

6.    Global Warming

 

A thesis statement takes a big broad idea and narrows it down to a nice specific idea that you can deal with in 300+ words.

 

Living in the City – compare to living in the country

-better worse for new immigrants of working age, trying to start a new life

1. better job opportunities, more employment

2. variety of educational choices, schools- learn skills, meet new friends, contacts, build a social support group

3. public transportation- busses, Skytrain, UBER, accessible- cars are $$, licencing takes several years

 

Thesis statement: For new immigrants just coming to Canada, settling in a city makes more sense than settling in a smaller place.

 

 

small town better

1.    build social group quickly

2.    cheaper

3.    ???

 

 

 

 

Write a thesis statement for each of these topics.

Imagine what kind of essay do you want to write?

What is your focus, your take on the topic?

Write a TS that reflects that.

1.    Food

2.    Noise pollution

3.    Living in the City

4.    Beauty

5.    A Happy Life

6.    Global Warming

 

Chat:

1.    a happy life Not a sentence

2.    food Not a sentence

3.    Beauty is one of the most blessed of creatures. ??? Although it’s good to think how much we have to appreciate it and how much we have to pay for it? NO CLEAR MEANING

 

Clear, simple, easy to understand. We aren’t writing poetry here.

 

4.    A happy life may vary depending on the level of every person’s contentment. Meaning? Not a clear meaning.

5.    Does anyone know about this dish from Japan? There are a few steps to make a Japanese soboro donburi dish. specific, clear

 

6.    Food is daily our life. Not a sentence.

Food is a daily requirement in our life. Not interesting idea

          Our daily food intake nust be balanced into three basic groups each of whcih are essential to our health. These three groups are fat, carbohydrates, and protein.

 

7.    People are willing to take extraordinary steps to achieve their idea of beauity. For example, plastic surgery is quite popular in some Asian countries. However, I would not recommend that for some reasons.

8.    I think a happy life is a good topic. WEAK We can talk about friends, goals, travel and so on RW

9.    You don’t have to be millionaires to be happy.It is something you need to bring in your life . By doing these simple steps giving [spending-some with family ]some time to family ,having dinner together and understanding each other. RW

10.                       To stay productive you have to eat green and healthy food.

I don’t understand.

 

11.                       A happy life depends on your surrounding environments such as friendly neighbours, stable job and family members are healthy. RW

12.                       The diversity that the city has makes it a more convenient place to live in. diversity=convenience ww?

 

13.                       Noise pollution is the most terrible pollution in the world for several reasons.

 

14.                       We need to eat to live. Whatever we take will affect our bodies; therefore, we need to have smart choices what to intake our bodies for these reasons.

 

 

15.                       There are different ways to achieve a happy life. BASIC TS

 

16.                       Food-focusing on multicultural food: 1.having friends from different culture and share your food with them. 2 learning recipe from internet and practice cooking. 3 Go to restaurant and try different food over there. NOT SENTENCES

 

 

17.                       Music is an international communication ?? , and it is also a powerful therapy to our soul. TWO IDEAS

Music is powerful therapy to our soul. ONE IDEA- MUCH BETTER

 

18.                       A happy life is a goal for each of us. To have a happy life, you should follow some tips. Make good friends, have a family, have a job that you love. CLEAR, SIMPLE

 

19.                       You have to  know yourself  before you can find happiness.

Essay is about how to find yourself?

 

20.                       Fast food is nowadays considered a normal eating venture. People are not just eating out on special occasions or weekends anymore. It means that all the time they mostly eat fast food. However is fast food good for our health? Fast food is not good for health for three reasons.

 

21.                       Last month, it was above 40 degrees the hottest temperature ever recorded in Canada. Global warming is very important issue for several reasons.

 

22.                       Healthy living starts with good food. There are  several reasons for this.

 

23.                       Nowadays, global warming is getting worse and worse. We can reduce global warming in several ways. We can use clean resources, we can protect forests, and also we can do more recycling and reusing.

 

24.                       People should follow seasonal food so that these food can bring their functions to our body. Meaning?

People should eat seasonal food so that these food can bring their functions to our body. Meaning?

 

25.                       Vancouver offers a lot of fine and exquisite cuisine for different types of diets.

26.                       What you eat directly affects your health.

27.                       In my opinion healthy and delicious food bring joy to family and friends . I understand eating healthy food is a challenge but not impossible. Eating healthy means a long life.

 

28.                       Being wealthy does not always mean having a happy life.

 

 

My observation: simple sentences make the best and clearest Thesis statements.

 

, and  , but   because  gets too complicated, several ideas flosting around- only want one for the TS

 

 

TOPIC:Beauty

MY TAKE ON THE TOPIC:

- girls- unrealistic expecations, internet, social media

 

In the past few years, social media has created a culture of unrealistic standards of beauty for women. For many young girls who are exposed to these images, this has caused enermous anxiety with their perceptions of themselves and their self-worth.

 

Body paragraphs – three reasons

 

 

For Eng 12, the teacher give you a broad topic.

Love, Music, Justice, The Imprtance of Friendship

 

In EF6, I will give you a very specific topic. You will not have to do as much work narrowing it down. I narrowed it down for you.

 

For example:

 

 

1.    Food How can eat healthily in these busy times?

 

2.    Noise pollution

3.    Living in the City Would you prefer to live in a city or in the country?

Is it better to raise kids in the city or in the country?

4.    Beauty Is it better to beautiful on the outside or on the inside?

 

5.    A Happy Life The Secrets of a Happy Life

What are the secrets of a happy life?

 

For practice, get some ideas together and write a TS for these topics.

Come up with three ideas that would be for the body paraagraphs.

You do not have to write the body paragraphs.

If you would like to try a full essay for practice, I would be happy to read it.

 

1.    How can eat healthily in these busy times?

2.    Would you prefer to live in a city or in the country?

3.    Is it better to raise kids in the city or in the country?

4.    Is it better to beautiful on the outside or on the inside?

5.    What are the secrets of a happy life?

 

 

*NOTE: The Bicycle essay is a good model of a simple, well-organized, straight forward essay. It is bit dull and boring, but it will get good marks.