E11 First day sentences

I am not the only child in my family, I also have two brothers.

comma splice , not strong enough

I am not the only child in my family; I also have two brothers.
I am not the only child in my family as I also have two brothers. adverb clause
I am not the only child in my family because I also have two brothers. 
I am not the only child in my family since I also have two brothers.
Sarah is not the only child in her family; in fact, she also has two brothers.

Sarah is an outgoing girl and she likes to socialize with people.
Sarah is an outgoing girl, and she likes to socialize with people. COMPOUND SENTENCE

Sarah is an outgoing girl who likes to socialize with people. ADJECTIVE CLAUSE

Sarah is an outgoing girl; of course, she likes to socialize with people.

, and = ;

She was studying in Killarney High School before she comes to South Hill.

She was studying in Killarney High School before she came to South Hill.

VERB TENSE- very tricky

She is now working in/at McDonald’s, to earn some work experience. PREPOSITION

She is now working in/at McDonald’s to earn some work experience.

PREPOSITIONS- tricky
PHRASAL VERBS- "talk to"
verb + preposition
HEART of ENGLISH

talk to
talk with
talk about
talk for


She was a Canadian citizen since last year.

She has been a Canadian citizen since last year.

VERB TENSE present perfect

FREE ADVICE- forget about past perfect, nobody uses it
She had lived in Calgary for three years. XXX
She lived in Calgary for three years.

She wants studying business in BCIT.

She wants to study business in BCIT.

She loves to play soccer and travelling.
PARALLEL

She loves to play soccer and travel.

She loves soccer and travel.

She loves playing soccer and travelling.

*** VERB STUFF

like, love, hate, prefer, can’t stand, start, begin continue

I like to run

I like running.

She prefers to stay home.

She prefers staying home.

There is a girl in my class whom I learn alot about today.

NOBODY SAYS whom

who/whom

whom- unusual usage, very formal

"This is my friend whom I told you about." WEIRD
"This is my friend I told you about." 

There is a girl in my class who I learned a lot about today.

EXCEPTION

To whom it may concern,

She has no siblings and no pets as she is allergic to all types of fur.

She has no siblings; also, she has no pets as she is allergic to all types of fur.
She has no siblings. Also, she has no pets as she is allergic to all types of fur.

CLEAR
STYLE- VERY PERSONAL

Her goal is to attend BCIT and take courses in Finance. Which I think is wonderful. SENTENCE FRAGMENT

Her goal is to attend BCIT and take courses in Finance which I think is wonderful.

Her goal is to attend BCIT and take courses in Finance. I think that’s wonderful.

He like playing video games and playing basketball.

He likes playing video games and playing basketball.

subject verb agreement

I go

You go

He goes

She goes

careless error

The two brothers was running together. XXX
The two brothers were running together. 

FREE ADVICE- check each one

I find something different about her is that she does not scare of anything that means shes a brave girl and I think brave girls are always successful.

I find something different about her which is that she is not scared of anything. That means she’s a brave girl, and I think brave girls are always successful.

Furthermore, she does not have a job but if she have a opportunity she wants to be a tutor.

Furthermore, she does not have a job, but if she has an opportunity, she wants to be a tutor.

PROOFREADING

YOU HAVE TO BE YOUR OWN PROOFREADER.

***EXERCISE SENTENCES***

He is a shy boy like me, because we don’t like to speak in front of people.

After graduation, he will go back to Antarctica and works over there.

While she have free time she will go to her friend’s house have a party.

He like watch movie. But, he like play soccer.

He has makes the plan go to UBC.

My partner, Fancy Pants, he comes from China.

Her future plan is go to college do accountant.

He really like basketball, he said that he play it every week.

Chilly is a kind person who always take care of he friends.

When she was in Antarctica, she taking Bachelor of Science in Pharmacy.

UBC is her dream school. But she will take general science in Langara.

Her strong heart keeps her happiness.

His hobby is computer games, then he hopes his future job will be connected with his interests.

Cookie Monster comes from Antactica and he is a International Student.

He have not yet to get a work.

He just passed his 19 year birthday.

Joe is a pen collecter, he loves to collecting expansive pens.

I meet a cool guy today, he is a Japan.