The object looks long, and the object looks thin. REPETITION, POOR WRITING
The object looks long and thin.
The object looks long (adj), thin (adj) and measures (verb) about 8 inches in length. NOT PARALLEL
The object looks long and thin and measures about 8 inches in length. SIMPLE
The object looks long and thin, and it measures about 8 inches in length. COMPOUND
The object looks long and thin; also, it measures about 8 inches in length. COMPOUND
The object which looks long and thin measures about 8 inches in length. COMPLEX- adjective clause
VARIETY OF SENTENCES
2. The object which has a diameter that measure about 1/8 inch has many flat sides but appears rounded. COMPLEX- adjective clause
The object has many flat sides but appears rounded; it has a diameter that measures about 1/8 inch. COMPOUND
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3. It comes in many colours outside and inside, but usually the outside is yellow and the inside in greyish black. COMPOUND
4. There is often writing and a number which is often a 2 or a 3 along the outside of the object. COMPLEX- adjective clause
5. The top of the object is made of rubber which has an aluminum band around it, and the bottom of the object comes to a sharp point. COMPOUND COMPLEX
6. The body of the object appears to be made of wood, but the inside is actually made of lead. COMPOUND
The body of the object appears to be made of wood while the inside is actually made of lead. COMPLEX- adverb clause
7. The longer you use the object, the cat shorter and fish duller it get.
The shorter and duller cat the object gets, the more you fish use it.
8. The object is often used by students, cat artists, and office monkey workers.
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