Monday, 18 January 2016

EF4/5 10:25 Sentence combining "French Fries"

SIMPLE
COMPOUND
COMPLEX

sentence combining

KERNEL- usually the first sentence, main sentence to build on

1.French fries are loaded into a basket. KERNEL
2.The French fries are white. FIND NEW INFORMATION

White French fried are loaded into a basket. GOOD
French fries are loaded into a basket, and the French fries are white. REPETITIVE, UNNECESARILY OVERWRITTEN
3.The basket is wire.

White French fried are loaded into a wire basket. NICE SOLUTION

4.Then they are lowered. KERNEL
5.The lowering is slow. lowering is noun form of lowered
slow is new information
6.The lowering is into oil.

Then they are lowered, and the lowering is slow. REPETITIVE

slow is an adjective. We need the adverb: slowly.

Then they are lowered slowly
The lowering is into oil. NEW INFORMATION

Then they are lowered slowly into oil. GOOD SOLUTION

7.Their bath crackles.
8.Their bath foams.
9.Their bath is hot. hot is an adjective

Their hot bath crackles and foams. SIMPLE
Their bath crackles and foams, and it is hot. COMPOUND
Their bath crackles, foams and is hot. SIMPLE
Their bath crackles and foams because it is hot. COMPLEX
Their bath which is hot crackles and foams. COMPLEX

10.The potatoes release a puff.
11.The potatoes are thinly-sliced. thinly-sliced is like an adjectice
12.The puff is steam.

The potatoes which are thinly-sliced release a steam puff.
The thinly-sliced potatoes release a puff of steam.

steam puff , thinking cream puff

They come out crispy brown and streaked with oil. SIMPLE


They come out crispy brown and also streaked with oil.

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