EF3/4 Sentence combining "Cooking Class"

Cooking Class

1. The cooking class is a break. KERNEL
The cooking class is a welcome break.
The cooking class is a welcome break from concentrated hours of English and Math. SIMPLE
The hours of English and Math are concentrated, so the cooking class is a welcome break. COMPOUND

2. There is an atmosphere. KERNEL - centre
There is a relaxed and friendly atmosphere in the class. SIMPLE 

relaxed (adj) I feel relaxed.
relax (v) She has to relax after work.

There is an atmosphere that is relaxed and friendly in the class. COMPLEX - ADJ CL

There is a relaxed atmosphere in the friendly class.
The atmosphere in the class is relaxed and friendly. MOST NATURAL

3. There is no homework, but there is delicious food that can be eaten at the end of the lab.

4. This week, Hamish is learning recipes that use eggs and dairy products that include milk and cheese.
This week, Hamish is learning recipes using eggs and dairy products that include milk and cheese.

This week, Hamish is learning recipes of how to use eggs and dairy products that include milk and cheese.

5. On Tuesday, he cooked an omelette that was light and perfect; it was stuffed with cheese, green pepper and spices.

On Tuesday, he cooked a light, perfect omelette that was stuffed with cheese, green pepper and spices.

He cooked a light, perfect omelette that was stuffed with cheese, green pepper and spices on Tuesday.

The omelette that was cooked by him on Tuesday was light ...

6. Hamish is growing boy, so he ate the omelette that contained four large eggs; then he did the dishes and cleaned the lab before he left for lunch. COMPOUND COMPLEX - hardest one

EF3/4 Paragraph writing

Sentences - simple, compound, complex

grammar- verbs: gerunds, infinitives, modals, causative verbs

Sentence combining - practical, useful, effective


Paragraphs-

- sentences written together on one topic
- How many? 5-7,8
- block

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       Start after the indent. 
Double-space.
Follow the margins.


Why do you like Vancouver?

     I like Vancouver for three reasons.
Vancouver or GVRD

     Vancouver has many good things going for it, so I like living here.
Topic sentence - addresses the question directly, puts the paragraph on topic

My hometown in Chile is very small. XXX


Supporting points - 3-4,5- aim for 3 if possible

1. weather 
- reminds you of the weather in your country
- four seasons
- not too hot in summer- go outside, still be active
- not too cold in winter- not much snow, can walk, don't have to worry about frostbite
- not too dry - good for skin and hair

2. beautiful city - #1 in the world
- nice parks - QE. Stanley Park, Central Park
- lots of trees, tall, older
- mountains
- nice new buildings
- beaches - Jericho, Second Beach, Wreck Beach, Kit Beach

3. public facilities
- community centres
- hospital
- churches, mosques, temples
- schools, colleges, universities
- VPL

4. multicultural society, lots of diversity
- restaurants
- festivals
- languages
- First Nations cultures


Concluding sentence -summary sentence, clincher

EF3/4 Sentence combning "Seawall"

Nice mix of sentence styles:
simple
compound
complex

1. We were riding bicycles on the Seawall. Simple
We were riding bicycles, and we rode on the Seawall. Too much- overwritten
When we were riding bicycles, it was on the Seawall. Complex

2. Our bicycles were rented, red and white. AWKWARD
Our bicycles were rented, and red and white. SIMPLE
Our bicycles which rented were red and white. 
COMPLEX
Our bicycles which were rented were red and white. 
Our bicycles which we rented were red and white.
Our bicycles which were red and white were rented.
Our rented bicycles were red and white.
SIMPLE
May I rent a bicycle which is red and white? SIMPLE

I rented a bicycle. Active voice
The bicycle was rented. Passive voice

3. We wore helmets which were required.
We were required to wear helmets. Natural sounding

You are required to wear a seatbelt when you drive a car.

5. The ugly helmets were for safety.
The ugly-coloured helmets were for safety. SIMP
The helmets were an ugly colour which were for safety. XXX
The helmets which were for safety were an ugly colour. CMPLX
The helmets which were for safety had an ugly colour.
We wore the helmets for safety even though they were an ugly colour. COMPLEX - ADV CL

6. The Seawall was busy and crowded.
The Seawall was busy and also was crowded.
The crowded Seawall was busy.
The Seawall was busy because it was crowded.

Because the Seawall was crowded, it was busy.

The Seawall was crowded, so it was busy.

When the Seawall was crowded, it was busy.

The Seawall was crowded; therefore, it was busy.

The Seawall that was crowded was busy.

The Seawall, which was crowded, was busy.

SIMPLE

COMPOUND

COMPLEX

That is all you need for any level of writing.

Skeletons of the sentences - the bones

The foundation

7. People were walking and rollerblading.
Some people were walking, and others were rollerblading.

8. We rode slowly, and I rode in the middle.
We rode slowly with me in the middle.

They rode slowly with me in the middle.

When I was in the middle, we rode slowly.

We rode slowly because I was in the middle.

9. My brother rode in front while his friend rode behind.  COMPLEX

When/While my brother rode in front, his friend rode behind.
My brother rode in front, and our friend rode behind. COMPOUND
My brother rode in front and our friend behind. SIMPLE

10. After we rode for an hour without stopping, I was out of breath and my legs were sore.
I was out of breath because we rode for an hour without stopping, and my legs were sore. COMPOUND COMPLEX
We rode for an hour without stopping; as a result, I was out of breath and my legs were sore. COMPOUND

Eng 12 Internet addiction

OCD- obsessive compulsive disorder

obsession - obtrusive thoughts that won't go away
compulsions - obtrusive actions that cannot be controlled

.exe  execute / run
BASIC run

execute a program/ run a program

companion computers - 

Her

computer-controlled doll- 

Eng 12 Writing

shorter writing (150w)

concise, dense writing

on-topic


Grabber
Start with a good Topic sentence that addresses the topic

Introverts have challenges in social situations
Use "Invitations' and "Here" as evidence, examples

incorporated quoted material "   "

plot summaries of both texts

Every paragraph has to begin with a topic sentence that addresses the question/writing prompt

EF3/4 Picture vocab

capital letters - large font
dhdhdhdhd
djdjdjdjdjdjd
djdjdjdjdj

parcel
package
box

hip

triangle, pyramid
the Sphinx

canoe, sailboat, rowboat, houseboat

vase
bouquet of flowers - in hand

flower arrangement


ikebana - Japanese flower arrangement

EF3/4 sentence combining "Dad at Home"

sentence combining - build concise, dense sentences

Create a nice mix of simple, compound, and complex sentences.

kernel = central sentence

kernel + add new information

Kernel = Jackie's dad is a truck driver.

new information = for 20 years
verb tense = has driven (present perfect)

Jackie's dad is a truck driver for 20 years. XXX
Jackie's dad has been a truck driver for 20 years.

Jackie's dad has been a truck driver for 20 years, and he is taking a year off to be with Jackie. COMPOUND
Jackie's dad is a truck driver who has driven trucks for 20 years, and he is taking a year off to be with Jackie. COMPOUND COMPLEX
Jackie's dad is a truck driver who has driven trucks for 20 years, and he is taking a year off, so he will be with Jackie. COMPOUND COMPLEX
Jackie's dad who has been a truck driver for 20 years is taking a year off to be with Jackie. COMPLEX
After 20 years of driving trucks, Jackie's dad is taking a year off to be with her. SIMPLE

CONCISE, DENSE

present perfect - started in the past, continue to now
past ------------- now
He has lived in Vancouver for 15 years.
You have studied English since Grade 3.

2. He now works at home with Jackie as a full-time parent.
His full-time work now is parenting Jackie at home. SIMPLE
He now works as a full-time parent with Jackie
at home. SIMPLE - CONCISE

3. They clean and repair the house; also, they cook the meals and shop.
They have fun when they clean and repair the house, cook the meals, and shop.
They clean and repair the house; after that, they have fun cooking the meals and shopping.
They clean and repair the house; then they have fun shopping and cooking the meals.

They clean and repair the house, cook the meals, and shop while having fun.

They clean and repair the house, cook the meals, and shop, so they have fun. COMPOUND

4. They play in the afternoon; sometimes, they paint, have a picnic, go to a movie, or cycle.

Before they go a movie, they play in the afternoon, painting, picnicking, and cycling.

5. Jackie, who is four, enjoys each day spent with her dad. COMPLEX- ADJ CL
Jackie who enjoys each day spent with her dad is four. STYLE IS OFF - IMPORTANCE OF ADJ CL, LESS IMPORTANT

Jackie is four years old; she enjoys spending time with her dad every day. COMPOUND
Jackie is a four-year-old; she enjoys spending time with her dad every day. COMPOUND

This class is two hours long.
This is a two-hour class.
 'two-hour' describes 'class'

good class, bad class, interesting class, boring class

Jackie is four and enjoys every day spent with her dad. SIMPLE
Jackie is four enjoys every day spent with her dad. XXX
Jackie, who is four, enjoys every day spent with her dad.
Jackie, who enjoys spending each day with her dad, is four. MEANING IS SKEWED
ADJ CL is less important, the information is less important

Michelle, who is a doctor, has brown hair.
Michelle, who has brown hair, is a doctor. BETTER

ADJ CL is less important than MAIN CLAUSE
who is...
that is... LESS IMPORTANT, EXTRA INFORMATION, NOT THE MAIN INFORMATION

My dog, which is a good guard dog, is white.
My dog, which is white, is a good guard dog. 

My white dog is a good guard dog. SIMPLE