Friday, 24 September 2021

EF34 compound sentences, student paragraph examples

 

 

EF34

Good morning, everyone.

We will get started at 11:00.

 

Friday is the happiest day!

 

 

Today’s agenda:

·      Review Quiz#2 – compound sentences

·      Continue with narrative writing

Look at some of your examples from homework

Teach email attachments

·      New knot Friday

·      MONDAY Begin complex sentences- adverb clauses

·      HW   Test#1 Monday- narrative paragraph

Read “Residential Schools”- two versions-beginner level & high-intermediate level

Read both or choose one.

Next week – focus First Nations peoples in Canada

 

 

Quiz #2

Create a compound sentence for each.

SV, SOBA SV.

SOBA  so or but and

 

 

e.g. and cat

         The cat is asleep, and the dog is awake.

 

1.   and        culture

Canada has a lot of different cultures, and India does, too.

I like to learn about Canadian culture, and I enjoy learning English.

This culture came from long ago, and it is difficult for young people to follow it.

 

REMEMBER:    Send me sentences that you want to go over together, by

email or on paper.

 

2.   but                  married

Sam and Janet are married, but they are not happy.

Sam and Janet got married, but they don’t have any kids.

My sister got married, but I don’t want to. I want to stay single.

-single and free like a bird

He was married by his family choice, but he was not happy.

was married by his family choice – awk “He was in an arranged marriage, but...

 

married(v, adj)

Junko married her sweetheart. (verb)

She is married. (adj)  She is tall.

Junko and Paul got hitched.

 

marriage(n)

 

Funny?

If you kill somebody, you go to jail for 20 years.

If you get married, it’s for life.

 

 

3.   so          family

My family wants to go to Paris for a vacation, so but I can’t go with them.

I am working and taking classes, so I can’t go with them.

I will go to Edmonton, so my family is living there. RW

My family is living in Edmonton, so I will go there.

My family lives in Edmonton, so I will go there.

 

I live in Vancouver.  -sounds permanent, put down roots

I am living in Vancouver.  – sounds like just for now. temporary

 

I have a big family, so we are live together. vf

I have a big family, so we live together.

I have a big family, so we are living together.  so or and?

I have a big family, so our house is a zoo.

big busy house- a zoo

 

family (singular) one group

class, team, group, jury -singular

 

4.   or          roommate

You can get your own apartment/place, or you can get a roommate.

We can meet at my place.

 

5.   and        raise

raise – lift, nurture, help grow

Raise your hand, and answer the question.

Mary wanted us to take Sarah, and we decided to raise her.

Rain is raised The rain is starting, and we can stay in the car.

It was raining heavily. It was pouring down outside. It was raining cats and dogs. RUDE: It was pissing down.

Some organizations raise money, and they use that money for education.

He works hard, so he can raise earn a lot of money. ww

 

raise money - donations

 

The man got angry, and he raised his voice.

Don’t raise your voice to me! IMPERATIVE

 

Junko worked very hard, and she got a raise.

a raise- higher salary, every pay cheque

I asked my boss for a raise.

 

promotion – higher level job, usually with a raise

 

Junko got a bonus for her hard work.

bonus- one time $

annual bonus –extra money once a year

 

Asia- paid monthly

Canada- paid every two weeks

 

6.   but                  unusual

Hiking in Egypt is unusual, but in Canada it is very common.

In Egypt, hiking is unusual, but in Canada it is very common. parallel

Table tennis is a kind of sport that is unusual not very popular in BC, but Chinese some people still like to play it on the weekends.

This word is unusual for writing, but you can use it for speaking.

 

Keep studying. Keep practicing. It won’t get better by magic.

 

 

 

Ex1

310w TOO LONG! 100-150ww

Looks good on the page – one block of writing

 

          When I was a litlle kid, I lived with my grandmother in

country side. A lot of strange and creepy situation happened in

there ,and this is one of it. It was a hot summer noon. I was

exhausted because my room was literally like a hot oven ,so I

opened my room door and window. Cool wind blew from the

window and maked me drowsy. I put my bedding on the floor

and lay on it. It didn't take much time me to sleep , but I

shouldn't have done that. I woke up with the sound somebody

knocking on my door. I thought to my self 'humm. . . is my

grandmother back from her work already?'. I tried to get up

from my bedding ,but I couldn't move. I couldn't control my

body but my eyeballs. I rolled my eyes and gazed my room

door. My room door was open wide. 'but i heard someone

knocking on my door?' I thought. All in sudden , I saw

something. It wasn't looks like somebody because it streached

it's thin,long arms straight like a scarecrow and it's eyes had no

focus. It moved slowly to the front. It tried to get in to my

room ,but his streached arms stuck beside of doorway and

made a knocking sound. It did that several time again and

again.I was scared when it tried to get in to my room ,but It

looked foolish when he couldn't get in here. All in sudden, It

stop and turned It's arm pointing at me and said, "now I can

get to you". My breath stop because of scared and woke up

from that bad dream. After that dream, I always lock my door

before i go to bed because I saw a creck from the side of the

door which it tried to came in.

 

Ex.2

INDENT

This is a scary? story I experienced as a child.This is happened during the summer vacation. There was a man who had a lot of dogs in the neighborhood.His name is kita. I didn't have a pet, so I was interested in dogs.It was summer vacation, so I and my friends often met kita.At that time, I wanted to take a walk with my dog, so I asked kita.”I want to take a dog walk.”He say that it okay.My friends also decided to take a walk with the dog. The dog walk was fun and I walked without any problems. But happening happened. The dog that was walking started fighting.That caused the dog collar to come off and the two dogs ran away.My friend and I were impatient.The dog was so early and we lost sight of it.We kept running in search of the dog. If not found, we are over.I searched while thinking so.However, we miraculously found the dog and returned safely.I told kita about it, but I didn't get angry.But since then, I haven't walked dogs.I'm still scared when I remember this.

 

Ex 3 MUCH OF THIS IS NOT FIRMLY ON TOPIC

   I have a dream that I can have a place at university, but since a long time ago, I have had no chance because I have to work for a living. Nowadays, I moved to Vancouver and I have many opportunities to chase my dream. I was an English beginner. I studied at the South Hill Education Center. After that, I am going to college or university. My friend was afraid I was too old to catch up with young people. I think if I work hard, everything will be possible. The best part of my life has just begun.

 

Ex4 A BIT SHORT

INDENT

I want to be a teacher in the future because my parents are both good teachers.They are kind and friendly to their students. My dream is to be a good teacher like them. Being a teacher should know a lot so I must study hard. I will do my best to learn well. And Also, I should have good personalities such as generous,honest,warm-hearted ,patient and so on. So Therefore, from now on I will try my best not to lose my temper and be kind to others.

 

Ex5 LOOKS GOOD ON THE PAGE

GOOD LENGTH

       One of my dreams in the future is to become a Canadian citizen and have a successful work. As a insurance agent in British Columbia, Improve my English. I want to be become an insurance agent in BC. Also, I want to improve my Engloish. When I arrived to Canada two years ago, I didn’t have any hope about my life, in . In this country we were just my brother and me. Now two years later I’m feel more confident about my future or my destine, . I would like to try help other people like me without hope because I think be Immigrant is only for brave people when you leave your old life behind. And Also, just try to start a new one. I will work hard to goals all my dreams however sometimes I feel like a won’t be able to, but I will not give up. This is just one part of my dreams for my future.

punctuation

 

Ex.6 NOT ONE BLOCK OF WRITING

I arrived in Canada on May this year.

  Before I came to Canada,I imagined it 1000 times what I would do on the first day. Go to a restaurant to celebrate with my husband or just stay at home and so on.But I never expected to spend my first day in a quarantine hotel.

  I went to the hotel myself ,because my family cannot see me on the first day during the outbreak.When I went into the room,I immediately video chat with my family.And then I told my cousins and friends in home country that I  arrived   In Vancouver safety .After that,I practiced  tai  chi .This is the traditional Chinese way of exercise,I practice it almost every day.

 

FIX:

I arrived in Canada on May this year. Before I came to Canada, I imagined it 1000 times what I would do on the first day. Go to a restaurant to celebrate with my husband or just stay at home and so on.But However, I never expected to spend my first day in a quarantine hotel. I went to the hotel myself ,because my family cannot see me on the first day during the outbreak.When I went into the room,I immediately video chat with my family.And Then I told my cousins and friends in home country that I  arrived   In Vancouver safety. After that,I practiced tai chi .This is the traditional Chinese way of exercise,I practice it almost every day. I looked out the window,Everything outside the window was completely different from where I lived in China,Yeah I’m in Vancouver,I settled down here.At that moment I began to miss my relatives in my motherland. That’s my first day in Canada,It’s really unusual day, I think I always remember this day.

 

 

Ex.7 NEW DAY IN CANADA -title, make it a topic sentence

                                                             

I remember my first day in Canada like it was yesterday. I came to Canada from ABCLand in 2020. My first day in Canada was very good and it started from Vancouver  Airport. On that day, I felt strange because everything was new for me. The weather, transportation, language are different in Canada from my home country. I saw sky was so clear, Building was so big and air was so fresh that day. I enjoyed  the beauty of nature. After doing all the formalities at airport, I went in front of the airport door to seek my family. Finally, I saw them at a corner and I was very happy to see them. Then followed my brother and put my luggage in car. The weather was not so cold that day because it was spring, then I came home, then I went with my brother to stanley park I had visited and I enjoyed. That was all about.

 

Topic sentence?

INDENT When we came to canda sp Covid 19 Pandamic was be gone started in all of the countrys RW , and we had must stayed 14 days at home, it was so hard ,we had rented a basement for 2 month.our landloard was a kind man and woman and they helped our alot. and all the city was shut down. and we was looking for a house for long term. that was this house now we live and we had a good days in it .we have a nice nighbours.we found good friends and we saw some of the place in vancouver beacuse mostly places had was shut down for pandamic.vancouver has good weather and very interesting forests .I like walking at the sea side and look the ocean ,We like live in vancouver .and we are happy .We have not settled yet but We hope

 

*This needs to be rewritten in sentences with capital letters and punctuation.

 

My husband and I landed in Vancouver BC in July 2020, or I should say exactly middle of the pandemic. When we landed I was very excited, and also I was very worry about the COVID-19 pandemic. Because of the pandemic no one was allowed to pick us up from airport, so we took a taxi. That day or I should say that month, the

weather was extremely wonderful. Blue sky, crisp air, and it was quiet. It was sony day. On the way when we were going home the whole things was like a dream for me, because in Canada there are

different kinds of houses. I was surprised, because houses in my country are very different from Vancouver. We had rented a house from a few month ago, so we arrived home, and we should have to stayed in quarantine for 2 weeks period. Our friends bought for us food for 2 weeks. That was my experience for first day in Vancouver. And finally I have to say that I am very happy to be here, and I hope everyone, can live anywhere as the wishes.

 

Ex.8

   My first day in Canada... ohhh, it was unforgettable day.

It was very exciting. I was very happy and also very nervous. It was very difficult and I was very worried, because I traveled alone and my English was not very good and also I came in covid 19 time.

So I should have to get a quarantine for 14 days.

When I arrived Vancouver airport, the police officer almost gave me a ticket, because I had not have a place to stay at for 14 days, I just had a hotel reserve for 3 days.

But when I talked to him and explain my status, he didn't give me the ticket.

It was 3000 dollars.

After that I went to the hotel, I was so tired and so hungry, my fly trip took 24 hours to arrive Canada.

They gave me some food and some snacks, so I ate them and went to sleep.

It was a very long time sleeping and very comfortable.

My trip was a very big challenge and adventure.

It was very difficult days.

But now I am happy, because I passed these days, It made me stronger and made me do everything on myself.

And also I learnt a lot of things.

In ending, I will tell you something.

If you want to do something or you want to acheave your gouls, whatever you have, whatever your age, just trust yourself and do it, whatever your gouls are difficult.

Don't scare from anything.

Encourage your self and do it.

Just work hard for your gouls and for your future life.

You will achieve them and you will be a very successful person.

 

RW in one block of writing, not ten different sections.

 

 

Homework for Monday

1.    Prepare for Test#1 – narrative paragraph (100-150ww)

2.    Read “Residential Schools” I will email both versions to you today.

 

 

new knot

sliding hitch

So far we have learned:

bowline

perfection loop

sliding hitch

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