"blindfolded" (265)
The wild birds were "blindfolded" (265) because their eyes were frozen shut.
Incorporated- part of your sentence,
The sentence has to be grammatical
The wild birds' eyes were frozen shut. "blindfolded" XXX
The wild birds' eyes were frozen shut: "blindfolded". XXX
Incorporate the quoted word(s) into out sentence.
"skating" (265)
Because the roads were frozen, the people were "skating" (265) when they were going to the pheasants.
Because the roads were frozen, the people were "skating"(265) when they were going to the pheasants.
REAL SENTENCE
"froze shut" (265)
Their eyes were "froze shut" (265)
Their eyes were "frozen shut" (265) XXX
Their eyes were "froze[n] shut" (265)
[ ] square brackets
The boys "saw dark spots"(265) as they approached the birds. PAST TENSE
The boys "s[ee] dark spots"(265) as they approach the birds. PRESENT TENSE
[ ] powerful tool, be cautious
... ellipsis
"Some of them lifted their heads and turned them from side to side, but they were blindfolded with ice and didn't flush." (265)
The pheasants looked "from side to side, but
The pheasants looked "from side to side, but ... didn't flush" (265) because they were frozen.
ellipsis ... words have been omitted
ellipsis - powerful tool
using quotations
Here are some key points to
remember when using quotations:
1) Incorporate quotations into your
sentences.
2) Keep quotations to a few words. Quotations are like salt in food: a little
bit gives flavour; too much ruins the dish.
3) Use quoted material to support your
points.
4) Don’t use too many quotations. Pick two or three quotations to support your
brainstormed points and leave the rest.
5) Make sure the quoted material is
exactly as written in the story. Use …
and [] to make minor grammatical or stylistic changes.
6) Avoid repeating quotations.
7) After quoting material, go on to
explain why the quotation is relevant.
8) Avoid ending paragraphs with
quotations.
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