ENGLISH 11 Sentence combining variety- "Big Game Hunting" & "The Building"

Big Game Hunting
5. He must take care of the horses and the gear, supervise the food, ensure the safety of his clients, and make sure that they shoot and catch with photography whatever they seek.
5. He must take care of the horses and the gear and supervise the food.  Most of all, he must ensure the safety of his clients while making sure that they shoot and catch whatever they are seeking to photograph.
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The Building
1. When the streets that surrounded the seventeen-story-high building were deserted, the supervisor who was directing the levelling blew a shrill high whistle; then the technician who was in charge of blasting sent an electric signal that ignited the explosives.

1. When the streets that surrounded the seventeen-story-high building were deserted, the supervisor directing the levelling blew a shrill high whistle; afterwards, the technician in charge of blasting sent an electric signal, igniting the explosives.
2. Billowing dust clouds rose in all directions from ground level.
From ground level in all directions rose billowing clouds of dust.
3. They enveloped the lower floors and then reached out toward the onlookers who were in other buildings.
After enveloping the lower floors, they reached out toward the onlookers in other buildings.
4. At first, the structure seemed unaffected by the blast; then it trembled slightly and gently slid straight downward into the dust cloud.
Although it seemed at first to be unaffected by the blast, it trembled slightly before sliding gently straight down into the dust cloud.
5. The echoing explosion, which could be heard miles away, shook nearby windows and stunned the cringing onlookers.
The echoing explosion, which could be heard miles away, shook nearby windows, stunning the cringing onlookers.
6. Workers, police and onlookers cheered loudly, and waved their arms; they smiled at each other when the dust settled, revealing a mountain of broken bricks and steel.
Workers, police and onlookers cheered loudly and waved their arms; when the dust settled and revealed a mountain of broken bricks and steel, they smiled at each other.